I'm Singing in the rain,
Just singing in the rain,
Sudenly I feel nervous,
Like someones going to bash my brains,
I've got this eerie feeling,
Like someone's watching me,
Theres someone there
I guarantee.
My breath is quickening,
And my heart is rapidly beating,
I'm walking much faster,
To find the person I'm meeting.
I'm singing in the rain,
Just singing in the rain,
I was waiting at the park,
until someone bashed in my brains.
Author notes
Singing in the Rain - Frank Sinatra in A Clockwork Orange. Just a random poem! I was bored and I wanted to realte it to a clockwork orange. SO yeah!
A contest entry
- Soundtrack Inspiration by lie.
750 points, ended July 2, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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ha, i started reading this and i thought it was going to be kinda cheesy because it talking about dancing in the rain, ya know, kind of old and predicable and then all of a sudden i see bash in my brains and its shocking, it fits well, ha
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Typos:
erie->eerie
waitng->waiting
I felt the last line in the first stanza seemed forced into place, and it was wordy compared to the rest of the piece. But other than that, this has a very lyrical beat to it, and the fluidity of the rhythm is very easy and consistent.
I like the darkened tone to this piece.
I think you could add to it, but this is a good piece. Thank you for entering.
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Hahaha, this is so wierd, but there are parts I reaaaally like "Like someones going to bash my brains." Paranoia sucks =P in cute ways sometimes. I've never seen A Clockwork Orange, everyone says different things about it...I'll check it out sometime. Frank Sinatra rocks <3.
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