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desert of memory

i walk alone
on this desert ground
dodging all the cactus's
and yuca plants

i can see the bones
of dried up animals

the sky is open
you can see for miles

far off in the distance
the mountains rise
like walls separating
the desert from others

it seems god and the devil fight here
the devil put what he wanted on the land
with all the thorns
and all the poisonous creachers
but god put something on it too
with all the flowers full of colore
and what little water he could put
with out it drying up
its always a war
between good and bad

here in the desert
you can always see
the lonely ghosts
of those
who walked this land first
they come and go
with there long hair
and moccasins
and wrinkled faces
carved by the sun
the natives that once walked
with dignity and pride
they always seem to have wisdom
shining in there eyes

far off you can see the coyote
playing hits tricks
on you

the desert is full of buetey
full of excitement and fear
full of adventure and curiosity
its full of power and strength
the desert is where i call home

Author notes

yea i wrote this when i was in new mexico. oh and i chose option 2

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  • SweetRoses
    September 2, 2008
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    This is a very beautiful write. Nicely done, very vivid.


  • suicidal-revenge
    June 20, 2007

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    wow this is so perfect
    you have made me see it so clearly in my mind
    i like how you got your idea to write this poem
    hope you are having and/or had a fun time in New Mexico


    -suicidal revenge-


  • celestial
    June 18, 2007

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    : )

    This was nice. I liked how you wrote about the native people of the desert. It sounded more interesting. Very elaborate.


  • MoonlightBeam
    June 18, 2007
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    This is really good, wow. I love it, great write!


  • Stone Guardian 1991
    June 18, 2007

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    Pretty Good

    Wow man. This is really good. I can see that it is based off of your current vacation. Not nearly as depressing as your earlier poems.


  • loveaswellashate
    June 18, 2007

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    this was really good to.. tho u have a few spelling errors nothing major tho.. but i love the imagery it was great...
    Laters
    Loves..*hugs*

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