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My Demons

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Feelings creeping over me

my demons back to play,

I feel them getting nearer

God help me if they stay.

 

For only people that I trust

know what I've been through,

there’s many think my life is fine,

they haven’t got a clue.

 

Deep inside my unclear head

in corners of my mind,

my demons lurk in shadows,

pushing, trying to find

 

Weaknesses I had before

the ones I can’t resist,

the ones that drag me deeper

into the dark abyss.

 

I feel my panic growing

I thought I’d found a way

to help me cope and deal with

the words I need to say.

 

For Gods sake someone, help me,

thoughts of the darkest kind,

my head is slowly spinning,

I need some peace of mind.

 

I know I’ve trod this path before

this time it seems much steeper,

the fears I feel inside my heart

are going even deeper.

 

If this is Hell, don’t leave me,

I beg you take my hand,

I’m frightened in this wicked place

stay with me, help me stand.

 

 

 

 

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  • mcrfan322
    July 26, 2008
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    great poem... i really liked the flow that was made into the poem... really dark... really depresing... great write.. this poem really hit me u know... ive been there before... great write... hope you win and best of luck to you///

  • mcrfan322
    July 15, 2008

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    great poem... i really understand where you were comming from.... this poem really hits close to home.... verry nice keep up the great work


  • Gwenevere
    July 13, 2008

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    Fears are always near the surface threatening to take a strangle hold.I find this especially true at night and you are right panic does set in.Then come the dreams because your brain never lets go of the memories even if we think we have.For me, they come out of the blue.It is hard to make sense of what happens.Maybe one day we will be able to bury these thoughts once and for all.Great poem that many will relate to.

  • angeldreams
    July 13, 2008

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    Awesome!
    Loved this one.
    The flow is so natural and the theme really powerful.
    Great piece.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • anguish
    July 11, 2008
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    Great peice, This painted a very dark picture and will get you to the finalists. Good luck!!


  • black lagoon x
    August 5, 2007
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    very sad and powerful.you did one of the best jobs in my contest because it was somthing with so much emotion yet it was probably hard for you to get down on paper,and also it rhymed.thank you so much for entering,i hope the demons don't overstay their un-welcome.


    -Y.W. xx


  • Musimwa
    June 19, 2007

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    Well written

    This piece is so emotion. It is sad too. I have an idea of such a deep reflection. One thing in life, if all the challenges, problems and hardships were not there in our life, our life was not not going to be worthy living. I believe, at this time, lets be patient. It may pass. Lessons are we to grasp at the end of the STORM. I love this deep reflection of the current situation. Keep writing, it is a therapy on its on. Good day Mum, i care.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 19, 2007

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    Stark, Dark, and Very Very Powerful

    This is very very powerful and sad as well. Full of emotion. We have all met those 'dark demons', at some point or other, in our minds. And I am still there, with them. Funny, how certain medications seems to stem the flow of such thoughts. But medication alone, is no cure.

    Everyone of us has personal demons that do battle with us. Your piece was stark and dark, crying out for help, and yet the cry goes unheard. Very very powerful and a very very good piece of writing.

    Wayne
    xxx


  • arafura gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    dark abyss...

    I feel it poet! I remember writing a very similar poem a few years back... I think we are on the same wavelength!


  • Puppydog gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    SO EMOTIONAL!

    This is so touching! I tend to fall so far that I find it almost impossible to find my way back. I though have always found my way back without knowing exactly how.


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    June 18, 2007

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    Wow

    this is SOOOOO AWESOMe! It's very deep and it's something i can totally completely relate to. You should go read some of my stuff and you'll understand what i'm talking about. This is just so beautifully written, the reader can actually feel everything, the pain, the terror, losing grip on sanity. Just so well written. I don't really know what else to say


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    A very dark place to be that I for one have had a small taste of and am glad that I never went deeper into my own shadows. another fantastic poem with a depth of fear undertaken. well written Brian


  • aurora13 silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Controlled flow of such deep feelings! You could depict the thoughts and fears of a mind so very deeply and yet never lost the flow , the form of poetry.. very well written.. the lines that touched me most were "the weaknesses I had before

    the ones I can’t resist,

    the ones that drag me deeper

    into the dark abyss.
    "

    Keep writing! and Keep sharing!


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    June 18, 2007

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    Thats amazingly dark...
    My favourite lines are

    If this is Hell, don’t leave me

    I beg you take my hand,

    I’m frightened and confused

    stay with me help me stand

    Brilliant - keep up the good work.

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