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Outpouring

I want to express my feelings
But I'm "lost in the game"
I don't know if I can
Even stay sane

When I do talk to you
You doubt how I feel
And I want to know
What's the deal?

You say that you love me
I believe that it's true
But I have a hard time
Believing in you

If feels like you're feeding
Me the same old lines
Well, I'm here to let you know
It's time for change

Because "I am barely breating
And I can't find the air
I don't know who I'm kidding"
You don't seem to be there

I would love to be with you
I truly honestly would
But I'm having a hard time believing
That we ever could

If we were ever together
At the current rate it seems
We would only be friends
But isn't that how our stories usually end?

We've lived through dissappointment
So we share a common "bond"
But I'm starting to wonder
How much longer can this go on?

Right now I'm pissed
And I'm steamed
But it isn't my place
To say any of these things

As I spoke with your "tall" friend
On Thursday afternoon
He asked if I was bitter
And that word seems to fit me right

I don't want to hurt you
I do really care
But I think you'd be better off
Playing with her hair

I wish I didn't feel this way
I wish I could let it go
But I want us each to be happy
And we'll be better off moving on

I hope we can stay friends
I love you more than you could know
But above anything that is why
I have to let you go

Author notes

This is option #1 for the contest.
This poem was actually written the day after the last day of school in 2006. All of the quoted parts have special meanings. If you want to know more send me a message.

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  • Chet W.
    September 3, 2007

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    Very Nice

    Great traditional ryhme scheme but I love how you shortened the last line of each stanza. Changes the rhythm and stuff. very cool


  • writeme10
    June 19, 2007

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    I get it, with a little added help. It's deep, maybe one day I'll show you some I wrote about this particular subject ha.


  • broken.inside.xx
    June 19, 2007

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    but you forgot to put he option number... you have unitl noon tomorrow or I have to disqualify you... sorry :|


  • broken.inside.xx
    June 19, 2007
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    It's a great write, and yes, you can enter it into this contest