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One Week

It starts with ONE minute
Of lying wide awake.
Then TWO-THREE hours
Of twisting and turning.

I'm kicking methadone cold turkey,
But with hot flashes
Pale, thin as a rail
I will never forget
How I went to bed
On Monday - FOUR days ago.

Not even FIVE minutes of sleep
Since then.  Saturday night, people go out
Saturday night, I go into seizure.
It is the best thing that happened to me
In the past SIX days.
It was almost like sleeping.

In SEVEN days,
I forgot what food tastes like,
Who cares about food?
I'll vomit it right back anyway.

Doctors say, no one died from
Opiate withdrawal yet.
They say, it's like a really bad flu.
They also say, human body recovers during sleep

A really bad flu.
No sleep.
Insomnia.
Instant insanity inside.

Today is Monday again.
I'm on my way to the methadone clinic
To sell my body and my soul once again
And buy myself ONE minute of sleep.

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Blackend Heart

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  • XweXareXbrokenX
    August 2, 2007

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    i really enjoyed this...theres so much just emotion...very very raw emotion and you can almost just imagine everything aspect or torture that is going on...its very powerful...thanks for entering...good luck

    XweXareXbrokenX


  • crimsondew
    July 16, 2007

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    This is a wonderful poem dealing with trying to sleep, but I was aiming for poems rying to evade sleep...


  • stop a bullet
    July 15, 2007
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    Very interesting. I'm not usually one who enjoys reading about drugs and all, but this piece caught me off gaurd and I enjoyed it. I Like the 2nd to the last stanze the most I would say.
    I'm not sure about how many contests you've entered in currently.. We'll see though. good Luck.


  • Ryno
    July 13, 2007

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    Word Count: 165

    I'm sorry, but this isn't close enough to 400, it is very far off and I will have to remove you from the contest, thanks for the entry anyways.


    Ryan


  • MercurialMist
    July 13, 2007
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    Thanks for your entry.

  • crimsondew
    July 6, 2007
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    The feelings are very lividly and beautifully displayed...I can feel the little hair on my skin stand reading this... The depth of the feelings is well brought about... I only hope that this just another poem for you now and not a situation. Thanks for the lovely entry!


  • oh willoughby
    July 5, 2007

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    "Not even FIVE minutes of sleep
    Since then. Saturday night, people go out
    Saturday night, I go into seizure.
    It is the best thing that happened to me
    In the past SIX days.
    It was almost like sleeping."

    wow, very interesting, and very good!


  • LucyLightning
    July 3, 2007
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    =]]]]]] awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
    see you in the finalists, babeh!


  • TrixieOne
    June 28, 2007

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    My favorite so far, like kicking dope. I got that feeling like I wanna crawl outta my skin or blow my skull out just reading this.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Wow, this is really deep.
    I understand how you feel and know
    the frustration and madness that you
    write about as you try so desperately
    to fall asleep. It can be very challening
    and overwhelming at times.

    I think you did a great job with this
    one here. Thank you very much for your
    entry in my contest! I appreciate it and
    wish you the best of luck with it here.
    Keep up the wonderful work!




    Jeremy0826

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