Wake me from this dream of you
Make it how we used to be
From when i once always knew
That you truly loved me.
Now we stand here
Lacerated by our differences
As we both fear
Our angry heart's changes.
I wish you were here
To hold me close
To hold me near
Yet this is what we chose.
I despise this segregation
And i'm sure you do too
Your words are my mutilation
But, Daddy, i love you.
You wake me from this dream
And we are close forever
Things are not as they seemed
Because we are together.
Author notes
this is about my dad. we are going through some REALLY hard times 2gether right now.
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nice
very nice peace. alot of us are just too damned stubborn to realize what we have untill its goneas you put it in/I wish you were here
To hold me close
To hold me near
Yet this is what we chose.
hope you too work it out Peace out Anguish
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Awww. That was deep. Daughter/Father relationships are always really fragile...I hope that you 2 can work things out. Cos I'm sure he'll be missing one heck of a daughter that has some amazing talent if it doesnt work. Best of Luck.
Kelly
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so i realized its been forever scence ive read one of your poems so i decieded to read one and this one brought tears to my eyes...i think you may want to show your dad this...it may help but it was a gorgeous poem...keep up the great writes
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If anyone understand a bad relationship with their dad its me. If you ever need to talk give me a message. I loved this, the flow was nice and the way the abckground made the poem seem more clam was nicely done. good job.
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Wow, really deep
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wOW
This is nice. Sometimes fathers can be strange, unpredictable creatures. I dn't have anything nice to say about fathers or father figures but.....i'll refrain in case you really do have a nice dad. But i think you guys, if he's in the minority and a nice, reasonable dad......will work this trhough TOGETHER.
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I loved the lacerated line, that is pure genius, couldnt quite make out if it was from the point of view of a child of parental seperation, or if it was the beginning of an ending, but i guess good poetry should take a degree of thought before you se the real meaning, Well done as ever VB
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