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An adagio evening.....


The music hums in my ears
melancholy like never before
and the roses laid on the table
are as red as one from those cliched poems
i dug out from my closet last night


The awkward silence hangs between us
like a pearl made of dewdrop
on the tip of a leaf
and hesitant fingers interwine
to compensate for the loss of words

Slowly we savour each drop of caffeine
dipped in vanilla essence
relishing life
the way we knew it before
rejoicing in the fact
that it'd be smoke ever after

The sun disappears into naught
as if covered by a magic shawl
at first orange
and suddenly all black

The evening ends here
and so does the magic

One last smile
and I search my pockets
for a remaining cigarette...

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  • Danna Hobart
    April 8, 2009
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    Nice imagery and tone. I liked this very much. Thank you for entering my contest.

  • madgirlinlove
    June 30, 2007
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  • onerios13
    June 25, 2007

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    The awkward silence hangs between us
    like a pearl made of dewdrop
    on the tip of a leaf
    and hesitant fingers interwine
    to compensate for the loss of words


    Although you've been caught red handed in entering a pre-written piece, lol, I'm still going to comment because I've never read this before and because it's a very lovely piece filled with beautiful imagery. It's rare to read such delicate poetry, and it's always a delight when one finds a poet who has that ability. So though it's an old piece, it's still a good piece.

    Thanks for entering.

  • Nicole Hanna
    June 18, 2007
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    Why you sneaky little.... LMAO I knew I had read this before! You can't enter a pre-write as a new write... that's ... illegal or something.

  • Nicole Hanna
    June 18, 2007
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    The last three lines of this were beautiful, maybe because I'm a smoker, so partial to cigarette references. lol Any any near-reference to coffee also does me in a bit too, so I think you've got a lethal combination with this piece. I saw the title of this and could've sworn I've read it before. That's generally not a title one forgets. Ah well. Thanks for entering!


    • The Phoenix Returns
      June 18, 2007
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      Too busy (or should I say lazy??) to write something new....can't this stay??

      • Nicole Hanna
        June 18, 2007

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        lol sure, only because I'm a little impressed with myself right now that I remembered this poem from six months ago


        • The Phoenix Returns
          June 18, 2007
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          Ah,I'll take that as a compliment (unless you found the poem to be exceptionally ridiculous)!!

          Thanks a lot!!

          • Nicole Hanna
            June 18, 2007
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            LOL I assure you, I never remember the ridiculous ones for longer than... oh... maybe two weeks


            • The Phoenix Returns
              June 18, 2007
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              Haha...I tend to remember the ridiculous ones a lot longer infact! Had a great time blasting them when once we were all active on Pompous R Us!

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