The music hums in my ears
melancholy like never before
and the roses laid on the table
are as red as one from those cliched poems
i dug out from my closet last night
The awkward silence hangs between us
like a pearl made of dewdrop
on the tip of a leaf
and hesitant fingers interwine
to compensate for the loss of words
Slowly we savour each drop of caffeine
dipped in vanilla essence
relishing life
the way we knew it before
rejoicing in the fact
that it'd be smoke ever after
The sun disappears into naught
as if covered by a magic shawl
at first orange
and suddenly all black
The evening ends here
and so does the magic
One last smile
and I search my pockets
for a remaining cigarette...
A contest entry
- Open House by Nicole Hanna.
2000 points, ended July 9, 2007, 39 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - India Ink by Danna Hobart.
400 points, ended April 8, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice imagery and tone. I liked this very much. Thank you for entering my contest.
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The awkward silence hangs between us
like a pearl made of dewdrop
on the tip of a leaf
and hesitant fingers interwine
to compensate for the loss of words
Although you've been caught red handed in entering a pre-written piece, lol, I'm still going to comment because I've never read this before and because it's a very lovely piece filled with beautiful imagery. It's rare to read such delicate poetry, and it's always a delight when one finds a poet who has that ability. So though it's an old piece, it's still a good piece.
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Why you sneaky little.... LMAO I knew I had read this before! You can't enter a pre-write as a new write... that's ... illegal or something.
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The last three lines of this were beautiful, maybe because I'm a smoker, so partial to cigarette references. lol Any any near-reference to coffee also does me in a bit too, so I think you've got a lethal combination with this piece. I saw the title of this and could've sworn I've read it before. That's generally not a title one forgets. Ah well. Thanks for entering!
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Too busy (or should I say lazy??) to write something new....can't this stay??
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lol sure, only because I'm a little impressed with myself right now that I remembered this poem from six months ago
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Ah,I'll take that as a compliment (unless you found the poem to be exceptionally ridiculous)!!
Thanks a lot!!
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LOL I assure you, I never remember the ridiculous ones for longer than... oh... maybe two weeks
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Haha...I tend to remember the ridiculous ones a lot longer infact! Had a great time blasting them when once we were all active on Pompous R Us!
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Ah yes. Sigh. The good ol' days.
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