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Paper chains

Missing image






Like a bird

with clipped wings,

we flutter;

          lift off a few feet

                    then tumble towards truth.

 

     If only

     this dampened draft

     could gear into

     a forceful gale,

     providing these primary flights

     substantial thrust.

 

Yet, sociatal fingers

have locked paper chains

around our limbs;

filching freedom of flight.

                        (and thought)

 

But when sparkles sprout,

resplendent strength

within our skin,

feathers combust

- spontaneously -

incinerating stringed sheets

of society.

 

The phoenix within births,

then finds freedom

                          in ashes.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The challenge: inspired on following write

http://allpoetry.com/poem/2517622

26 lines

Metaphorical

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  • Swan song gold member
    October 27, 2007
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    Awesome write. Very well penned!


  • MargaretG silver member
    September 14, 2007

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    That is a terrific metaphor for the illusions which we imbibe with our milk. We are struggling against chains which seem solid until strained, as we "tumble towards truth". Well done, very insightful. Your vocabulary is complex, check spelling of spontaneously.
    Awesome graphic!


    • leander Moderators member
      September 14, 2007
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      Thank you for the spell check sweety

      I should use that more often actually
      thanks for skipping by

  • thelovesongwriter
    July 24, 2007
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    the imagery is great in this piece, certainly mystifying<3 great write


  • Celticmoon gold member
    June 20, 2007

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    Lee I should start punishing you. Each round we go through this. You think you won't be able to write and yet your muse comes out dancing the jig to pen a piece that is nothing short of amazing! I so love this and I do believe you have done another fabulous job here in this round.


    Blessings
    celticmoon

  • gaze
    June 19, 2007

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    Doesn't it suck and hurt when we think we are going to fly high, and suddenly we have our flight interrupted?
    Another great poem Lele, you never lose that wonderful touch of creating images!


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    Wonderful metaphorical piece of writing that offers the reader so much food for thought. If I look at my office I can indeed see and feel the "paper chains", lol. Loved the depth of thought you've weaved into this poem, my friend. Those last few lines are just magical. Wonderful poetry - and so good to find this new one by you this morning!!

    ~ Nicolette


  • LadyUnique silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    now this is simply cool... very, very cool very tight


  • Yemassee silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    I wondered if you'd mention the Phoenix, it certainly built up to it. So the flight is from truth? But as I read the metaphor, flights never get very far when they are lies...we get caught and our wings get clipped.

    You sound like a Nihilist, wishing to destroy everything false...problem with Nihilists, they never said what they'd replace the destruction with. But yes, if it's false, destroy it and hope something true grows from it.


  • Lost Like Woah
    June 18, 2007

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    wonderful write, filled with your usual big words and twisted imagery, lovely though. i bet somone will have to look part of this up..lol. but anyway a very nice write, very much you.


  • Amaranthine Lover gold member
    June 18, 2007
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    beautiful piece,
    love the imagery
    keep on writing

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