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Without Even A Kiss Goodbye

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I loved you once in June
when your heart seemed warm
filling my head with misconceptions,
you swept me up like a raging storm

like many before and after me
a string of hearts that never mattered
left lying in an abandoned castle
fairytale dreams left shattered,
but now it's come full circle
so it's time for you to cry
Your eyes were black with emptiness
without even a kiss goodbye.

I am sure you will find another
to manipulate in time
Just tell her that you love her,
in pages of stolen rhyme.
My heart goes on without you
but your memory lies in a dark place
and this song plays as the record skips
I want to see hurt in your cheating face.
This will be my last poem of you
because you are not even worth a sigh.
Your eyes were black with emptiness
without even a kiss goodbye.

I loved you once in June
when your heart seemed warm
speaking of seagulls and deep blue sea,
you swept me up like a raging storm
I hope you think of me for a brief moment
when you hear that Leonard Cohen song play,
remember my soft voice, my loving eyes
and the tender heart that you threw away,

and if ever it is possible
for you to feel devotion,
I hope you love with every breath
and your heart is consumed with emotion
only to awaken to a note that makes you cry
when she says she left you for another
without even a kiss goodbye...



♥



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Inspired by a bad memory
and a Leonard Cohen song "Hey, That's no way to say goodbye"

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  • Bob Fox
    June 11
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    Lynda

    That ceating face. They are never real. Pound them poet. Take them to the end zone & stuff them.


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 12, 2008
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    Funnily enough this was for my last content about the same subject matter I see! This is so poignant, I am sure that I said it before - but this poem is indeed one I adore, and is refreshing to read it once more. So much beauty in the gentle wave of ache displayed. Thank you for your entry & Best wishes!


  • camus gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    Oh boy, this smacks of poetic venom lol. I enjoyed reading the poem but somehow - I don't know you at all - I felt a love still resident for this scoundrel, beneath the contempt I mean. I also admire your inspiration in the shape of Leonard Cohen.
    Beyond the music and the meaning of these poetic words, I sense a sadness and loneliness in you. It's as though you don't realise how lovely you are and need reassurance.
    Great poem, deserving of the award.


    • poet2angels gold member
      September 9, 2008
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      lmao I like your use of the word "scoundrel" ...and I am happy to say that this was a poem of closure that I needed to write about the past I am in a much better place now and can just consider the source and leave his memory shoved in the back of an old dusty box with the Leonard Cohen CD...He introduced me to Leonard so I wrote it based on that song knowing it would make him mad lol...I am rarely a spiteful person so I hope you will check out any other piece of my work I would hate for you to leave with only an impression of a vengeful lady....but anyway ty for the lovely comment

      Lynda


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    March 8, 2008

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    Brilliant

    The poetess writes of pain suffered by one that seemed to play on heart strings. It is sad that such people can play these hurtful games that crush a heart and enduce such feelings of agony. It is good to see that the poetess seems to have overcome such pains and can move on being able to pen her feelings to release the soul to fly once more. A very well desrved gold with this deep meaningful write. HM

  • Have left the site
    January 31, 2008

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    Dear Lady, I can see why you have a golden trophy on this poem. It is a very angry and sad poem, aptly so for a contest titled Scum of the Earth. It is sad what we will do to one another. You have a lot of talent and use language well. This is very good. -Wil

    • poet2angels gold member
      January 31, 2008

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      Thank you for the kind comments. I very seldom write angry poems. Almost all of my poems are about love and happy things, but sometimes we all have to vent


      Lynda


  • Naridill gold member
    November 8, 2007

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    Wow, beautiful and heartbreaking. This piece shows such emotion through a whole, the flow compliments the write just enough. Nicely done.

    Thanks for entering and much luck ~~~!


  • Errant Panther gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    wow, a haunting sadness in this, but I could hear it as a soft lamenting ballad as I read it, well done and nice to see a step out of the box for you.

    "I am sure you will find another
    to manipulate in time
    Just tell her that you love her,
    in pages of stolen rhyme."

    Absolutely love the way you crafted those lines and the mood they create.


  • Endeavor gold member
    August 29, 2007

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    Excellent


    This tore me apart

    I loved you once in June
    when your heart seemed warm
    speaking of seagulls and deep blue sea,
    you swept me up like a raging storm
    I hope you think of me for a brief moment
    when you hear that Leonard Cohen song play,
    remember my soft voice, my loving eyes
    and the tender heart that you threw away,

    and if ever it is possible
    for you to feel devotion,
    I hope you love with every breath
    and your heart is consumed with emotion
    only to awaken to a note that makes you cry
    when she says she left you for another
    without even a kiss goodbye...

    I guess I was due for a good cry

    I thank you for moving me
    even if the place was dark

    I will pray for you heart tonight

    Rick


  • Dmj
    August 15, 2007

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    Earned that gold

    this reminds me of the girl in my poem she, i thought we were going to have something special but she left without even saying goodbye. then she wanted us to still be friends but i couldnt do it. anyways off my sad life this poem just invokes so many past problems and emotions. Keep up this stuff

  • Mercury Rising
    July 23, 2007

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    Exceptional

    Congratulations of winning the gold trophy with this lovely, lyrical poem. Are you a song writer as well, by any chance? Because this wonderful poem sounds to me like very smoky and soulful ballad. A very fine piece indeed.

    David Michaels

    • poet2angels gold member
      July 23, 2007
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      this is one of my few lyrics...It was inspired by a Leonard Coehn song.....I write a lot of love poems, this poem is one of the few angry ones lol


  • Dragons Lady
    July 20, 2007

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    A beautiful poem and well deserving of the gold. Congratulations. A well deserved kick to the betrayer. I love the last stanza. Well done.


  • checkmate
    July 4, 2007

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    Oh wow. This certainly deserved the gold! A beautiful piece. Great job! And congratulation!


  • tomisb
    July 3, 2007
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    Congratulations. I couldn't think of a better choice for first. Very powerful. Love Tom B.

  • PerfectImperfection
    June 27, 2007

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    That is such a sophisticated and absolutely beautiful poetic kick straight to the shallow heart of the betrayer. Excellent emotion, very powerful and surging with an amazing depth into moving forward; leaving the pathetic excuse for love to fend for his self-absorbed self! Bravo! Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!

  • Endeavor gold member
    June 18, 2007
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    Excellent

    I loved you once in June
    when your heart seemed warm
    filling my head with misconceptions,
    you swept me up like a raging storm

    The opening and ending words make the story complete

    What you sow, ye shall also reap

    Well said

    Rick

  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Excellent

    Just a shame that some one else will probably be in the same boat as you were right now with this cheating idiot. great write Brian.


  • kaibab silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Wonderful rhyme and flow and dearker drift of love misplaced...angels are born is such a flurry of spun emotion spilling grace...lovely work angel friend...


  • BeautifulFlame
    June 18, 2007

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    A very tell it like it is poem! Its very hard to be used and feel betrayed ! I hate this for you my heart goes out .
    Hugs
    ~lisa~


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    Excellent
    Hits the nail on the head for me
    Liars, users, manipulators, and users aren't worth the emotional hell
    Excellent verse

  • tara wilson gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    "like many before and after me
    a string of hearts that never mattered
    left lying in an abandoned castle
    fairytale dreams left shattered,"...
    I love every line of this poem, the rhyme is just perfect - not overbearing and flows so well, this is excellent


  • Annalise
    June 18, 2007

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    !!! Yeah!

    We know how I feel about this particular "scum of the Earth"! Great poem, Lynda.




  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Wow, I love this piece from you!
    Very deep and I love your honesty
    and emotions throughout this one.
    You can feel love and be that kind
    of person that you can only wish is
    in the heart of your lover. But, like
    the old saying goes, it takes two to
    make a long-lasting relationship.
    Sounds like you were used and unappreciated
    throughout your past relationship.

    Well done here my friend and good luck to you
    with this one! Always a pleasure to read
    your work here! Thank you for sharing it
    with me and keep up the wonderful work.




    Jeremy0826


  • Legend silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Yep there is a mean side to you but planted and nurtured by another I love your free form poetry But who could deny that this piece reads and works so well in rhyme. As always you provide me with work that is a joy to read Thank you Good luck in the contest


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    "I loved you once in June
    when your heart seemed warm
    speaking of seagulls and deep blue sea,
    you swept me up like a raging storm"

    Sighhh...He didn't deserve you, my Friend...& you deserve so much better...I've always thought the best revenge is living well; show 'em just how good your life is without them...it drives 'em nuts... Good luck in Wendy's contest, Sweetie... Wanda

    • poet2angels gold member
      June 18, 2007
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      awwww, ty Wanda....My mean side...
      Have to express it once in awhile and this contest gave me a chance hehe
      Love ya

      Lynda

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