She is going to be crying again tonight .
Her body will be trembling with fright .
She has been deeply hurt by him once again .
Inside her body hurts with pain .
She tried hard not too make him mad .
Because if she did she knew her happiness would be destroyed.
He had hit her again .
Time after time .
Making her cry .
He had shouted at her louder and louder .
Is this good bye.
Then he said sorry and held her close .
Saying it was her fault .
She knows he had made her believe she made him lash out .
Saying she was the one he could not live without .
Things will be fine for a few days .
Then he would go back into his wicked ways .
She had just let him back into her heart .
Even though he was tearing her apart .
She had silenty weep when he was not around .
She was so frightened .
Just to make a sound .
No one knew what went on behind closed doors .
Not even about her hopeless wars .
One day he would go to far and kidnapped her.
Do something that would really scar her .
There was nothing anyone could do
No one knew .
So for a week she went though this .
Until the police got a tip .
They went and found her tied to the bed .
It was her life or his.
He is no longer living .
But she can still hear the gun shots .
firing in her ears .
Author notes
Everything I had is gone
A contest entry
- The Dark Light.{{Personal Writes}} by Broken Machine.
1600 points, ended July 5, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sadness and Darkness by My Darkness.
600 points, ended June 26, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Darkness, Let Me See Your Darkness by AshesFromFire.
700 points, ended July 21, 2007, 79 entries
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*sigh*...very real, very vivid, very...dark...sad...
Well written....
Smile♫
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what a story you've told. there are times in this life when we cannot speak. and those are the times when it would make all the difference. in the end, with this story, seems the wickedness found its own end, as it always does one way or the other. very sober poem, and is well written.
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Wow... This write is really deep. I agreee with Broken-Angel, it does feel real when you are reading it. It truely does. Keep up the good work. This is amazing.
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Great Work !
Dear Live.
I hear you're pain in your'e poetry. You havel ived
through a nightmare that not one oof us could ever have gone though. Keep up the great work. -
this is a great write, it feels so real when your reading it, loved it xx
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Very sad write here
It is sad how we so want to help some people and in trying they abuse us and then say look what you have done it is a sickness only a dr can heal .If you are in a relationship like this Run honey Run for it is your life you are playing russian rullette with . Every day is where he will keep you dangling on a string for his amusment and after each beating he will cry and say I cant live without you abd I will kill myself oif you leave .They all say it and yet its not themselves going through this violent physical beatings its you and it wont stop just bvecause you love them Run now beofre he twists your mind so that you will begin to feel like it is your fault and when that happens so many are killed the violence gets so bad and he wants someone new that will cower before him in fear
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My heart goes out to you. This seems so real. I'm glad you got out but sometimes the cost is expensive. Keep penning.
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Geart poem. It made me sad to read this and it made me want to help people. Keep writing and God Bless.
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This is a very powerful and emotional
piece of writing. It bares your soul
and touches all who read it. I really hope
this is not a true story. Either way, my
thoughts and prayers are with you.
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Totslly Awesome !
Life, I hear you're pain, believe me I do ! I know that you have suffered a lot in you're life , please remember that there is a Good God up there who loves you and who will prootect you ! Please believe that.
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Wow you blew me away !
It's so sad that you actually had to go through sll thid duffering and pain. I just want you to know that their is a God up in heaven who does love you and cares aabout you. This pain and suffering that you have had to go through has made you the person and the writer that you have become. Keep up the great work my friend. -
powerful - I like it.
I really like the openness of sharing in this poem. It is clearly an incredibly hard situation to be in. Suggestion...check the spelling and the tenses. It seems to jump between future, present and past. Some of the wording interrupts the flow of reading it. But the message is a powerful one.
I really think this poem is worth working on some more. I would love to see it after some rewrite.
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Powerful piece,very painful...
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wow
that is really powerful. It's something that not many people enjoy talking about, or even writing about, but you did an amazing job. congratulations!
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very dark. This is a deep seeded emotional piece. This is a story I remember being told and all I can say dear friend is that it's hard but you are not alone. Well done.
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Very sad words written here...this does happen everywhere...I want this to be fictional but it reads so real. I hope all is healing now...life does go on...take a different path...thanks for sharing
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I understand this well
you done a great job.
Smile,
Judy
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Wow really liked you're poem !
Wow you blew me away. What a great job. Keep up the great work.
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Ok, it appears that I read this before...but I don't know if I was aware at how true it was...and I forgot parts of it...I didn't realize it(the problem you write of) was this bad....sorry about the multiple comments!
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I am sorry to hear this and how your relationship had to prosper and end. It must have been a nightmare and you are so brave to have come out of it. Your emotions hold much power in your mind, as well as in your writing. You must be grateful for that police tip.
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Wow, such a powerful and sad write. I hope this did not happen to you. Wow so full of chilling imagery and emotions, if this did happen you are so lucky to still be alive Great write
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Yes this is about my life in the past .
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I hope, from the bottom of my heart, this is not a personal write.
You did a great job of getting the emotion across.
All in all you did a great job! Bravo!
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this is quite a story... i think you are strong for writing such a thing, but it lacks poetic flow, it's a bit more like a book, the content is good, sad, but you should try to be more fluent... good job and thanks for entering
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I am so sorry to hear about this, dear! If you ever need to talk, I am here. You let your emotions out so well, within words. I must say though, in stanza two, for "lounder", I think you meant "louder. Also, in stanza 6, I think you meant "too" instead of "to". Otherwise, you have made this piece flawless. I don't understand what possesses some to go so far as to inflict emotional, mental, and physical pain upon others. I felt as though I was in your poem and can relate to a lot of it. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing!
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That's a really good poem. I'm sorry this happened to you. I can kind of relate in a way. Thanks for entering this contest and good luck!
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