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Cursed

Hearken my love and heed this letter well
For as you do the charm will surly last
Pow’rs that be have blessed my unholy spell
Unbreakable charm of magic I have cast

Devour each word and know that as you read
Thou shan’t forget the pow’r of written verse
Eternal soul and that which you must heed
I tell you this so you may know the curse

You drank the poison, it is now too late
For by reading these words, the cursed is you
Damned you are so relish your new born fate
Bask in eternal torment you ensue

For all who crossed me in this mortal life
Shall be afflicted with eternal strife

 

 

 

Author notes

English Sonnet

The volta changes at L9 where it is then too late for the reader. (unless you're my friend; hehe)

Sonnets are formal poems and consist of 14 lines (3 quatrains and a couplet) , traditionally written in iambic pentameter - that is, in lines ten syllables long, with accents falling on every second syllable.
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    October 7, 2007

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    Great Spell and educational as well. Wonderful English Sonnet and your words are very powerful....Chilling spell indeed for those who read it. You leave the reader in suspence wondering if he or she is forever under your power....

    "You drank the poison, it is now too late
    For by reading these words, the cursed is you
    Damned you are so relish your new born fate
    Bask in eternal torment you ensue

    For all who crossed me in this mortal life
    Shall be afflicted with eternal strife

    BRAVO! WELL PENNED!
    Hope you had fun at our Spell Casting Party!
    Thank you for your entry and I wish you the very best in the contest!
    Take care,
    david


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    October 6, 2007

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    Thank you for your magical entry

    G'day Amera

    Interesting charm here ... I do not understand the style exactly but it is intruiging none-the-less

    I like the last 2 lines best
    Best of luck in our contest
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda


  • duana
    June 21, 2007

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    My favorite part is Devour each word and know that as you read
    Thou shan’t forget the pow’r of written verse

    Thjis could developed in an amazing way. They are amazing lines.


  • ellipsist
    June 20, 2007

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    wonderfully dark

    I love this!

    beautiful! the transition from one thought to the next, the flow, they are so seamless-seeming and natural...


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 20, 2007

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    I think I need to start taking some poetry
    classes...you write like a dream, my friend.
    Love, Lane


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 20, 2007

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    You go Form Queen you, lovely little dark sonnet here...good reflection & perspective that now we are cursed and damed to torment because we have read these words...awwwww....nice twist....good luck DOLLFACE!


  • Lord Merlynn
    June 19, 2007
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    this is an exemplory sonnet, my friend. Great write here. *smiles*


  • ennovy silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Beautiful written sonnet, fits well with the picture and give us a nice dark concept. Thank you for entering my contest...............novy


  • Desire gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    Wow!!

    You are tooooooooooo darn good Form Queen
    Wow!! Magnificent piece penned and love the verbage You have used- Brilliant
    Loved it!!
    Flowed so smoothly- Beautifully Dark
    Thank You for sharing this!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    June 18, 2007

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    A+++++++++++++++++++++++++ WOW!!!!! I love it. You have mastered the dark arts. You Rock! Three bunnies.


  • RedAquarius
    June 18, 2007

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    Oh, lovely and dark - what a unique twist to use the poem as the curse! I bet Lord Merlynn liked this quite a bit! Great job!


  • bedovich
    June 18, 2007

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    another fine sonnet yayyyyyyy great job hun i like ur dark sonnet alot lve you princess

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