You pathetic creature .
You feel so much sorrow.
For yourself.
Look beyond your own well being.
Feel for those who surround you .
Their lives so painful and sad .
Yours so full of hope and desire.
No need for self pity .
You can survived the worst .
That life can throw at you .
Do not succumb and become .
Someone that no one wants to know .
Scatter the seeds of forgiveness
And build yourself a better life .
Author notes
I am still alive
A contest entry
- Anything goes! by Wonderwhenitllrain.
300 points, ended June 20, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Absolutely - though easier said than done, that you wrote it out is progress for you, and progress for those of us who read it..
Marvelous!
Smile♫
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Wow Totally Awesome !
You have expresse you're slef quite well here. You know that Sel Pity is one of the Seven Deadly Sins amd for good reason. Once you wallow in it you can never get out ! I really like you're poem. Keep up he grreta work. -
Live !
Why you have hit the proverbal nail right on it's head.
That's why self pity is one of the "Seven Deadly Sins !"You can check out my poem of that title ! Once you get mopping around with Self Pity it takes a miracle to get you out ! Keep up the great work. -
Live !
Why you have hit the proverbal nail right on it's head.
That's why self pity is one of the "Seven Deadly Sins !"You can check out my poem of that title ! Once you get mopping around with Self Pity it takes a miracle to get you out ! Keep up the great work. -
Brilliant
I know there are many out there who always feel pity for themselves. They seem to go through life like this
poor me!
We all have as you say pain and sadness
Wish these type of people stopped!
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That is so awesome. I love "scatter the seeds of forgiveness and build yourself a better life." I was abused by my mom and am doing my best to overcome it. I know that it does not define me and that I can become a very positive loving person despite it. That's an awesome poem.
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Live !
Hi ! Don't be so hard on your self. You're a veyry good writer, just try to write something other than this dark stuff all the time ! Keeo up the great work, -
Still in you're dark phase here !
Hi,
Where have you been ? I haven't recieved any e mails from you lately. A good piece here but still a little on the dark side. Keep up the great work.
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I wish I could scatter the seeds of forgiveness I have not been able to forgive those who have hurt me so bad yet. I admire your strength. I hope you are doing well we have not talked in so long
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Wow, awesome poem.
I like this:
Scatter the seeds of forgiveness
Very well written.
really great job and thanks for entering
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Ah...I always forget these...have some applause!*clap clap clap*
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This piece went really deep and was packed with emotions. I don't want you beating yourself up here, for you have been through a lot. Take a bit of time to mourn if you must, but I know that you have done so much for others...like you dedicate your whole life to everyone EXCEPT yourself. Well, in line two, I think you meant "much" instead of "such", but otherwise, this piece was flawless. It flowed so smoothly, though held intense, suspenseful emotions! Keep up the great work adn good luck in the contest!
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