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Catty-Cornered Stops.

Like black limousines,
they prowl long dark alleyways
seeking fancy fare.

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  • acqua
    June 20, 2007

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    Oh, I also love the image of the black limousines, it works so well here as does the whole of this as these sleek cats prowl seeking ''fancy fare''...nice wordplay and great imagery. Good Luck in the contest!


  • NoWayJo
    June 20, 2007
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    I love the image of cats prowling as long black limousines you've written into this haiku.  Though the image I'm posting with this comment is a little "colorful," it's exactly as to how I envision this herd of prowling cats:

     

     

    Thank you so much for this entry to the contest!

     

    Jo 

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    Dear poet,the alusion to black limousines was effective,indicative of a sleek,shiny jet-black cat with a sense of regalness,moving at a slow but steady pace,also effective usage of alliteration.Well done indeed.


  • tara wilson gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    This is excellent - I love every word, so creative and I love the cats as black limousines


  • Nature Song silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Seeking fancy fares, they prowl in dark corners! Wonderful haiku! Love the imagery of a limo lurinkg like a black cat! Nice play on words. Good luck in your contest ~Sie

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