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there is peace in moments,

in minutes,

where therapy lies just shy

of border towns grown old,

and tequila sunrises

are all there is to drink,

when comatose eyes grow heady

with morning rush

of brandy and cappuccino mixers

flowering fanfare on hazy horizons

 

and still,

gazes are drawn to the spill

where sea meets sky,

bleeding blush to cover

blemishes bleached in holes

the size of needles,

pulling thread in random gasps

of astonished laughter

 

where even through life's little deaths

circles spin on moons

and craters thrive in custom pants

 

stretched tautly over slippery thighs

of cabana boys,

wearing summers subtle shade

of orange, while overhead another hole

pops in bubbled glee

bursting gas in crunching crepes,

while Suzette smiles

at such brighter colors blazing

 

but her faster friends with Mercedes Benz,

well,

she insists, they call her Suzy

Author notes

quick explanation lol, i havn't written in a few days cause of work and i wanted something pretty, but then ozone holes popped into my head and i thought i heard somewhere that that made the sunrise and sunset colors brighter but i could be way wrong as i'm way tired and go figure, this is the result...

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  • onerios13
    June 25, 2007

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    there is peace in moments,

    in minutes,

    where therapy lies just shy

    of border towns grown old,

    and tequila sunrises


    Mmmm...I really felt this one. It kinda popped and sparkled here and there, with excellent imagery and a deep care of colors and how they mix with emotions. The ending had a tongue-in-cheek charm to it, and the entire piece, although unique in each word, just felt 'right'.

    Excellent.

    Thank you so much for entering.


  • omega13
    June 18, 2007

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    this was so totally a fun poem!

    bursting gas in crunching crepes,
    while Suzette smiles

    that was cool

    but her faster friends with Mercedes Benz,
    well,
    she insists, they call her Suzy

    so was that

  • Nicole Hanna
    June 18, 2007

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    LOL Wether or not its true really doesn't matter, because I really enjoyed this piece. It was beautiful writing, beautiful imagery. That hint of cynicism was there, but it was subtle and so well-woven into the piece that you don't recognize it unless you look for it. All those lovely same-sound words were just yummy, and the rhyme got me too. That was great to run across because it just popped up every once in a while and I was like "Oh, hello there" lol. Last two lines really make the piece personal. Just damn fine writing I think.

  • Rowan gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    Whatever the explanation..I'm not sure either, but it sure sounds good to me! Excellent entry for this contest!


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    Liked the amazing alliteration in these lines, the flow and the vivid visual images you have portrayed through your words. The author comments explain just what is happening in the poem. Neat interpretation of the theme of this contest. Works well from where I am standing.

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