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What is Going Through My Head ?

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You are falling off a cliff. It is a very long fall to the bottom. What is going through your head? Regrets? Sorrows? Or are you just scared shitless?

Can be any form of poetry. Under 50 lines please.
Cursing is allowed.



What’s Going Through My Head ??
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I’ve fallen off that cliff
what am I to say?
flapping with my arms
still going the wrong way
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What’s going through my head ?
Air ! … tons and tons of air,
pulling at my face,
ripping out my hair.
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scared shitless ?
who really gives a shit?
If I don’t think of something
I’ll make a fuckin pit
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50 lines you want ?
Or maybe less?
Ssssssssssppppllaaaaaatt !!
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Shit happens…
Pushing up daisies... easy from this side.... (See graphics)

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  • Dragons Lady
    July 1, 2007
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    I love this. It has a sense of humor about it. I especially love the line: "Ssssssssssppppllaaaaaatt !!
    ". Just that one word says it all. Although I must admit to thinking of the Road Runner and Wile E. Coyote cartoons when he runs off the ledge and looks down. Well written.


  • angelica silver member
    June 24, 2007

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    Dear Barry,
    I don't know what would be going through my head. I think I'd be too busy chatting to my rellies who are there with me waiting to take me home.
    I'd be hoping I was dead before I went SPLAAAAAT!!
    Love Joan


  • Legend silver member
    June 19, 2007

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    Whats going through MY Head I don't think i know 50 lines of expletives I guess the repeated words Oh Shit would not make to good a read Well done for trying this one,Good luck in the contest


  • sublimewriter
    June 18, 2007

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    lol. i was thinking about the sheep jumping over a fence when i was reading this. is this about having writer's block and tearing out your hair?


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    June 18, 2007
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    FUnny hehe & haha


  • ScarletO gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    Oh, Bazza, with falling off the cliff, I wonder how we would have time for 50 lines of thought. Ker..splatt. Ewwwww,,,what a mess.

  • montez gold member
    June 18, 2007
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    Fair

    Only just a fair effort IMHO Barry.
    Sorry.
    R.

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