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Dante's Inferno (not an entry)

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What has taken you so long

Don’t you know I have things to do

I love you, precious Beatrice

But you leave me here to stew

 

Everyday is the same, dear

I look for you everywhere

With the problems that you cause me

It’s as if you just don’t care

 

My appointments are a shambles

I’m running late because, you see

I put you first before others

And look what it has gotten me

 

Certainly no love life and

Not a frolic to smile about

As I stand here waiting for you

I’m thinking of a way out

 

I’m tired of playing your game

So I shan’t be here tomorrow

I say goodbye with much regret

And what courage I can borrow

 

You’ve pissed me off for the last time

It feels good to finally let go

Don’t bother to come tomorrow

Because I’ll be a no show

 

Another contest poem for Hugh Wyles favourites

Dee Garner

© June 17, 2007

 

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  • JohnnyD gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    Hoodwinked!

    oh, how I loved this particular age and its its history of mysteries and daunting love, you have woven a true tale here with words and whimsy and aren't you glad the summer heat is over?


    Len


  • warrior-eagle
    December 6, 2007

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    HOODWINKED!

    Don’t bother to come tomorrow

    Because I’ll be a no show


    I LOVEDthat line
    This was another great write.
    you are VERY talented indeed.


    ..Simply Me♥


  • MargaretG
    June 26, 2007

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    Haha! I found this little rant delightful, Dee, great meter and rhyme, and just that peeved expression you expect of a frustrated lover. Do you think he protests too much?


    • catz Moderators member
      June 26, 2007
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      Thank you, Margaret I had a bit of fun writing this... I had set out to write a serious one but the overtook my muse

      Dee


  • Coeur
    June 24, 2007

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    Aww. I think Beatrice is finally getting what she deserves! To be so mean to such a good man!!!

    I loved this poem !! I liked the whole rythm and the simple, yet beautiful style. I liked the story and how you didn't run-on like I sometimes do(i cant help myself hah!)! Looovely. !

    • catz Moderators member
      June 24, 2007
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      Thank you, Coewr. I know what you mean about running on as you say you do... I'm often guilty of that myself.

      Thank you for your lovely comment on this very historically innacurate poem. It was fun writing it

      Dee


  • Hinemoa silver member
    June 22, 2007

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    Dear Dee,
    I love this version of Dante and Beatrice.
    He sure gave Beatrice her come-'uppance didn't he?
    That'll teach her to play with Dantes affections.
    I love the hilarity of this poem Dee, it made me chuckle.
    Hine.


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 22, 2007

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    There have been quite a few entries on this topic but yours takes a humorous and more modern approach. The wording seems more current, as the everyman voice and that is what helps to make it funny...I can see the characters, far less heroic that the traditional Dante and Bea...with their short fuses and petty angers.

    It was a nice change of pace.


  • Maureen silver member
    June 20, 2007

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    Very enjoyable!

    I loved this take on Dante's feelings for Beatrice! It's fun to imagine him tiring of his unrequited love and penning such a poem! Thanks for the laugh!



    ♥ Maureen


  • jenelda silver member
    June 19, 2007

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    Dear Dee, Ohh this is precious! Who'd have thought we'd get a funny version of Dante and Beatrice! Well done Dee I reckon it's a corker!
    Dante told her off good and proper! I love your poem very much.
    Love Jen.

  • pozo
    June 18, 2007

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    Good rhyme here, this was an interesting narrative poem Good luck in the contest (although you said it's not a contest poem... so only if you want luck)
    AP daughter
    Pozo


  • angelica silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    GOOD ONE DEE!

    HAHA Dee, This is marvellous! And I'm so sorry I kept Dante waiting for so long. And now he's left me! HeHe You see my first name is Beatrice! So I had to put that in, couldn't help myself, it must've been reading your poem. I like it Dee! it's unique.
    Love Joan


    • catz Moderators member
      June 20, 2007
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      And I thought of you when I wrote this... I hope you learned a lesson from that experience


  • hugh wyles silver member
    June 18, 2007

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    Dear Dee,

    This is a real rib-tickler! You have, with great humour, captured the antithesis of Dante's courtly avowals of love and his idol worship of the "Beata Divina" who is immortalised in his poetry.
    I have a feeling that your words mioght actually have been more aptly addressed by Dante to his Italian wife to whom he was espoused at the age of twelve by his parents and who he never mentioned in any of his poems - even in "Purgatory" where the divine Beatrice was his guide (she had died many years previously.)
    This is in no way to denigrate the wit of your interpretation, despite its mild historical inaccuracy.
    Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.

    • catz Moderators member
      June 20, 2007
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      Lol... I leave the facts up to you, Hugh, with your poetic and accurate interpretations of the facts

      And thank you anyway for your reading and comment of this intentionally silly inaccurate 'poem'.




      Dee


  • fleur de lys
    June 18, 2007

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    Dearest Dee

    That's telling her! You are funny! I see the humor in this and enjoy your poem very much. Thank you for writing a piece for the contest.

    Hugs and love,
    Petratani

    • catz Moderators member
      June 18, 2007
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      Thanks, petra. I just got in a silly mood and had been wanting to write another poem using your pictures. The thing is, I had been wanting to write one for this picture, but a serious one, and just couldn't get my muse to working right. I sat down to start one and this is what popped into my head

      Thanks for the nice comment


      Dee

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