Somebody, anybody, everybody wake me please
This night vision trip is incapacitating me
Down, must have slid off the edge of my bed
Alarm clock, ball in sock, doorbell, phone
Quick now, I don't think I have long
Everything is screaming for a break or two
I hear myself screaming, what's a girl to do
Shouldn't have those movies playing in your head
Somebody said.
But,
That's neither here nor there
For the moment I need rescuing
Who will take the dare?
Well luckily for me this time
The phone call broke my fall
And now I'm Okay
In one piece and all
But I'll never forget the thing
That could have been
And, I've moved my sleeping quarters
From the bedroom to the den
Author notes
This is a true story. Detail friendly.
In a list
A contest entry
- Falling off a cliff by Cerulean Sunrise.
450 points, ended June 18, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If You Wake Up In The Middle Of The Night; Call Me, Please!
Comments
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Hmmm Okay, maybe this one is a bit too abstract for me!
I will say this, I like the way you put this together, the beginning, your meter is fast paced, matching the 'panic-like' vibe and then it gradually mellows as the calm ensues. Really liked that. Not sure if this is just some wee hour anxiety or what, nightmare related....but still enjoyed what I could! 
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All Nightmare and the sensation of actually falling off a stiff cliff. Thanks for your interest. lol
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Different, I didn't get the ball in sock reference though (as a way to be woken up). I'm more curious about the dream details than the way you were saved from what was in the dream by a phone call after reading it though.
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Thank you
The details are as follows; I was falling off a very tall and formidable mountain to my death. That's it, end of story, It felt so real, lol
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I loved this it is so great and I think you did a wonderful job.
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Thanks so much, this review is a pleasure to read..lol
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Thanks so much, I appreciate this insightful review, truly I do. lol
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Brilliant! Who HASN'T had this experience???!!! It's the freakiest thing! I always get it when I'm just drifting off, but it's usually smaller than falling off a cliff, stumbling over stairs or something. Then I jolt awake, heart pounding, palms sweating, and there goes my good night's sleep. It takes me so long to recover from the shock!!! Great write, that really captures what this experience is like!
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lol it seems that I don't do anything in a small way, like your chairs, for me it has to be huge, tall scary moountains hahaaha. Thanks so much, I appreciate.
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wow! This poem was really cool! Did it mean that the phone call woke you up and saved you, or the phone call was so good that you forgot about your nightmare? Nice job, keep writing!
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Yes, the phone call woke me and saved me, for you have heard that if you don't wake up in time, you simply drift on off into the other life(world). So I was drifting when I suddenly woke up and came back this way, isn't that awesome?
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I simply do not understand any of this.
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It's a write that is responding to a contest, that's all. A friend of mine liked it and wanted to feature it and he did so. lol
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I was kinda confused what you were meaning. What were you trying to get across
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It's a contest entry, that is all. It's just what I wrote in response to the contest. A friend featured this for me, he liked it he said, thanks for your comment.
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were you dreaming of jealousy i wonder. i hope so..your sleep had quite some impact..well done, and best of luck in the contest
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TY Peter
Peter, no, no and no...smile, not even dreaming, it was really a nightmare. hahaahha, you've probably never had one of those. hahaha You actually feel like you are falling off a huge cliff, and then you fall off of your bed.
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Very interesting. Nicely done.
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Thank you.
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i like the phone calls that wake you up and you answer it and it is someone asking for you to fill a survey, and there is a great one that is a recorded messges. a good poem. spill ink and twist my brain into a dream shaped piece of pie.
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Same page again
When I get them I hear the first word and I just by reflex now just hang it up, we get so many, they are now calling me by name.
lol But, now, when you're dreaming and having nightmares of falling, that would be a very nice time to get one of those calls, but of course that would make life just too darn easy...and everyone knows we can't have that!
Thanks so much.lol
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