In front of the shower mirror my naked body peeked at me
Shapely full breasts hard and ripe waiting to be tasted
A curvy hip, soft and round with the pink intact cherry waiting to be harvested
Lusciousness and pleasure yet untouched, but soon to be possessed
Time is flying and my freedom is wearing very thin and tight
A nuptial consummation soon to come with all its delight
My first bridal night is my desire and my fear
I want to please him and to him be very dear.
My sultan will advance with all his strength and grandeur
To claim me as I am his right and I belong
A new life with my man
I have been told to satiate my Sultan and his wishes and rules
He will be my master and sultan
I will be his lady and mistress
Starting that night my intimate vaults will be unfastened by my master,
Willingly or forcefully he will conquer them and establish
Exclusive right and no one else will dare touch
He will claim my womb and invade its depth
Conquer its virginal resistance
sow his seed to carry his child and grow deep into me
Under his control and shield I will have to conform
Not out of fear but love, need and respect.
I will yield to him in trust and adoration
Keen on pleasing the sovereign of my heart incessantly
Vowing a life long pledge of faithfulness and love to him
everlastingly.
A contest entry
- The Erotic Challenge Season 8 by Master Ktulu.
300 points, ended August 21, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wedding Bells (a few options) by Immortale Bellezza.
450 points, ended September 18, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sensual Pic. Prompt (Adult) by nevadapoet.
500 points, ended October 23, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Take My Breath Away(Anything you Want) by fairytalelovestory.
675 points, ended October 19, 2008, 106 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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a very hot sensual write, however not a good match for the pic. prompt.
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thank you my dear for reading it and commenting :)
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i found this to really flow nicely and had a sweet touch to it along with the sensual and expectation. this is a good write and would make any Sultan or Master proud to read.
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Virginal Love and Acquiescence
This piece tugged hard and awakened everything dormant
While I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: I have been told to satiate my Sultan and his wishes and rules Love that line~ also
I'm making a mention on many writes-- As one of the judges, I'll mention what I notice but I don't like to butcher another person's work- I'm not a poetic guru and will never claim to be- this is just a personal note: the only thing that had me go back for clarity in a few spots was due to no punctuation and capitalization- but I understood what You meant
-some places stopped me in my tracks but I picked up where I left off Not life threatening there
I wanted to throw this Your way for review- I noticed You capitalized *Sultan* in one spot but not the others- also reference to *master* being lowercase- now normallyyyyyyyy if one is a submissive- the *master* is capital- so just a thought to pass on...
This is also not life threatening buttttttttttttt I used to use a lot of *and* in my writes and worked to cut down the usage only because it somewhat dragged the sentence- at some points hindered flow- I kept getting caught up in the *and*- hopefully that makes sense but know You took me for a wild ride ..Your energy and emotion could be felt I'm not picky whether there is punctuation or not as long as I don't get lost in the words and lose my place~Everybody has his or her own style preference so I take that in consideration
I won't write a novel of a comment this time but in summary
Magnificent pre-write entered ~
Challenge Matrix:
spelling/grammar/punctuation-18
presentation/creativity-18
how well you handled the challenge-20
"grab me" effect (how much did we enjoy reading this piece)-18
overall-20
For a total of 94 points
Sensual images & message You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Hope to read more...
Best wishes to You in the challenge Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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I like the different name for "master". I like the submissive side you show here and I really like the love and devotion shown to the man you are being given to. I like the love and romance, but it is not sensual enough for me. I don't find myself connecting with this piece. I think you still did a great job and it is a pity that the other contest holder could not recognize that love definitely does not only consist of the dreamy emotions, but also of the giving and sharing of the flesh. In that respect you nailed it. Good poem though.
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Thank you
in my opinion it is not only sharing the flesh, but deep emotions and giving no matter what, he becomes the master and i am his mistress giving in not in surrender but in trust. It is wonderful if both sides realize that and it is not misunderstood by one party or the other and being taken for granted wastes all love...
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I like the thought behind the write. It starts off erotic and flows into a deep and loving write. Interesting journey.
**Master Ktulu** -
You make your man so very happy!
This is a VERY sensuous poem, VERY exciting and arousing for a man. It is clear how you make your Sultan in Turkey SO VERY HAPPY!
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SORRY FOR NOT NOTICING THAT.
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Passionate
Nermin, very passionate, as usual. I haven't heard from you lately............is everything OK? Carole -
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heyyyyy
missed you beautiful. i loved sushi when i saw it. i had a hunch it was you. missed you too. arrived a couple of days ago with swollen feet like the nutty professor. getting better.
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Hot, sweet and tasty tonight, wow wee I love this from the frist line on I was ready for more love the flow of the words and the imagery oh my my mind should think such things oh yea hot, sweet and tasty tonight
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Well it does begin "EROTIC" and naughty but I like how it ends with love, faithfulness and devotion.
I like the "Sultan" idea.. a different name for "master" lol and I like how you describe it ...
A very nicely written descriptive naughty and loving piece. You just invaded all poetry members in to your private bathroom! lol and into your private ideas!
Keep on writing,
Nooni
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