Yesterday I opened my eyes to blue skies,
Clouds float by and I remember…
Lying on the grass
Pointing up
Seeing art in the passing moments.
I blink…and your gone, you’re really gone.
It’s been so long, so long but I can’t seem to let go.
It never floats away.
It just changes shape, like the clouds.
Even though they move and separate and combine,
They’re still clouds.
And love is still love
It’s still there, even though I’ve moved on.
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its hard to move on sometimes...
Please tell me what you think
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they say love puts our head in the clouds, so i would say your comparison is on point.
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i can get with that completely and i am moving on too even tho it hurts but im starting to like being single so i guess that is good
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Well I can see this poem has its fair share of admirers and now here is another. Its sadly sweet and I feel that combining the image of clouds changing, seeing them in their beauty and also in their passing nature, with love, is a very poetic and fitting coupling.
Thank you for sharing this and yes...sometimes moving on is hard, the memories of what WAS there seem to drift with us.
Best wishes.
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A beautful write
A beautiful write, a lot of thought went into this illustration between love and the clouds, both can be light and inspiring and fun to see. Or at other times they can both be dark and stormy. Love can take different shapes to like the clouds that change shape, love of parents, love of girlfriend/boyfriend, love in good and trusted friends.
Like the clouds it's not always a clear sky, and although the clouds let go of the rain, the rain falls, evaporates and returns as clouds again, as ones who truely holds a peice of our heart, for a time we may not think about them, but some where and sometime we never completey forget them.
As sky without clouds would be dull and boring, a heart without love would be incomplete, as a sky without clouds we may move on but it's always there somewhere. This is what that well illustrated write meant to me, Thank you for sharing I found it a very good and illustrative write
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"It never floats away.
It just changes shape, like the clouds.
Even though they move and separate and combine,
They’re still clouds." i love these lines, well done and i know what you mean by it being hard to move on a great piece, keep up the great work.
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"It never floats away.
It just changes shape, like the clouds."
hm. I can relate to this one.
well done. keep up the great work.
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I love this.
and yes, it is.
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The love and emotion in this is awesome.
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I do see the similarities to 'In Love' This is a gorgeous poem you've written...it's soothing and romantic...true love in the simplest form. <3
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Wow this is so powerful,so full of emotion,it is hard to move on, we have all at least experienced it and the love may never fade away...Thanks for sharing...Hazel
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FransB
Poem with great potential. Wording more often than not expresses the nature of the clouds. It has something like metaphoric [clouds and love]-logic
["They’re still clouds.
And love is still love..."
Let the 'poem' mature and then rework so delete some words or recreate.
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trancending
it is a way of nature, we have all been there and for some of us we are still there grasping for a moment in time, a memory that will make us smile....
hugs
L
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We've all been there.
Like pictures in the firelight this has such a tender feel to it. An inspired way to move on just like the clouds. I liked and enjoyed this splendid piece. It seems to me that you could take the first verse as a starter for a number of poems that expressed ephemeral moments. Wish I'd thought of it. Thanks for the read.
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Excellent
Oh so sweet and beautiful. Love this poem. Yes it is hard to move on and the love maybe always there. You did a wonderful job with this write. Great job.
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That is a very great way of putting it. I really can relate to this right now which makes it so easy for me to like it. -
Great write. Lots of emotion and imagery in this piece. Very true to life and love. It is hard to move on. Sometimes even if I really like someone who I've met and talked to in life, if I never get the courage to ask them out and see what could have been and if they walk out of my life, I'll wonder what could have been and will find it hard to move on while I'm still recovering from losing what could have been in life. Anyway, good write. Keep up the great work.
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great peice, you get to the point quickly and get it across well.
'It just changes shape like the clouds" really beautiful.
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This is such a lovely poem and speaks the words of truth. Sometimes it is just so hard to move on. I love the line "And love is still love". This is brilliant. After everything, love is still love, that does not change. Well done on this wonderful piece.
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this is so beautiful. well, i've been sitting here for about 10 minutes, trying to think of something worthwhile to say, and i can't. good job on this
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Thank you for your comment...I greatly apreciate it. I think that after someone breaks your heart, all you can do is move on. Thats the best choice anyways, becuase there is no use to dwell in the past. I really liked the last line "Its still there, even though I've moved on"
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