Dear Dad,
I know it's been awhile,
last time we spoke (screamed)
those words of farewell
and never come back.
Time has since progressed,
I'm feeling better
and stronger;
I still miss you.
Many attempts to dial your phone,
tears rolling down my face
but pride stood in the way;
I think you've won the war.
My heart has always been closed,
although we share identical blood
I just can't let you in;
you are but a ghost anymore.
Nevertheless,
you may not be of quality
but you are who you are;
this is my happy father's day
from my heart and afar.
A contest entry
- Happy Father's Day by whispernthedark.
450 points, ended June 18, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Golden Gallant - Pre-writes for Gold Brilliance by Namita.
300 points, ended August 4, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Sad poem. Good luck.
Luv,
Candy
Contest Holder
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OMG
This is ssooo sad! My Dad passed away suddenly last year and I miss him so much. One of the blessings though is that we were close. I knew beyond that shadow of a doubt that I was loved by him and he knew the same of me. Life is so short and I have no clue what happens after we die but what I do know is, while our loved ones are alive and kicking, that is the time to love and cherish them. It breaks my heart to see wasted emotion and such a waste of time. God, this one balls me up. Ecellent penning though...just sad. I really do need a hug. 
Ash
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This was very well penned. A very sad moment of reflection between you and your father. Excellent well deserving of the gold.
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very very sad. without a father though, I cant relate.
Good work,
Creatress -
This touches me
How I wish my daughters would reach out to me. the years, the pain. I wonder how they are. when life is unjust the young always hurt so much more. I hope your dad can be that father that I wanted to be. This truly touched my heart
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Congrats on the gold...this deserves it!! This one hit real close to home...only you seem to have some hope, some love...like you're coming to terms with it...I don't have that yet...just anger and sadness for my dad, maybe in time. This is a beautiful write...Great Job!!!
Wyatt
xxx
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This is wonderful, full of sadness and longing. I can feel the push and pull of emotions. It's got hope in it, though, and love. Just amazing. Congrats on a stunning poem!
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Beautiful, raw write. For many this is Father's Day, and it's every day, not just one day a year. Very honest write, beautifully done. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
whisper
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omg
thats how i feel about my dad
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