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I Still Love

exposed
on the rim of conciousness
swerving, careening, motionless
like trimmed heartstrings
atop the Dead Sea

ionized salt gathers
in my tears
like heavy quartz
because I looked twice
and saw more

I'm filled with reserve
but I still love


A contest entry

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  • as.phy.xi.ate. gold member
    June 19, 2007
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    Sad *splashes water* *sob* Never Look twice!

    But it was a good piece!!!!


  • Lj-
    June 19, 2007
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    Very nicely said.
    Lots of feeling.


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