The truth is finally out.
I'm just like one of the biggest assholes I know.
I share Dan's aura.
From my head to my toe.
When this first started I made a promise.
I told myself I wouldn't stoop to his level.
Even still, here we are.
I'm apparently the devil.
I try to convince myself this isn't the truth.
Being like him is one of the worst things I can think of.
I apparently am exactly like him though, even if it hurts.
Yet, for you, I'm still in love.
I'm doing the best I can.
I'm trying to kill this part of me.
I'm destorying it blow by blow.
The explosion creating debris.
I'm confident I'll win this waging war.
Once it's gone, it's you and me forever.
No more arguements within my head.
My love will never sever.
Please tell me what you think
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raw and open i liked it!
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Great and Deep
Emotions shown here. This was great with many decisions to make. Im sure all is well or will be.
Thanks for sharing,
Ephiphany
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The Demon's Live
The demons of jealousy, denial, excuses, procrastination, and yes, even self-hate. You are the only one who can do something about it Devin, so..., do it!
Well phrased and well written poem, nicely done.
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interesting piece... I like the rhyme
scheme... this has a pretty natural flow... nicely done... I don't know who Dan is, and won't ask... I had a teacher of mine once tell me not to use names in my poetry b/c no one reading the piece would know who they were... I found it helpful, but it could just be me...
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I used Dan's name because it gave meaning to me. I don't try to please my audience, I try to please myself. When they both meet though, it is a nice thing.
Thanks for the advice though. I'll try to remember it.
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Jealousy may be normal, but if not kept in check
it can become all consuming.
Full of emotion.
Hugs onesugar
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I hope you destroy this animal in you...
dan isn't all that bad anymore though...
jelousy is normal.
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Great love....
I like this piece it expresses great emotion i must say
you will shortly battling one of your essence group members in a contest so I am reading your work to see who you will go against.
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