distance keeps me here
searching for what I can't have
barrier to heart
never crossing to your side
Author notes
Quadraphore
4 lines,'5,7,5,7 syllables including metaphor
A contest entry
- Quadraphor Challenge III by sheltered.
525 points, ended June 20, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very good indeed, effortlessly done, well done on your trophy,
floorboards.
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Wonderful metaphor! congrats.
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Sweet
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Strong emotion in so few words. You do the picture so much justice with your writing. Good luck in the contest.
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Distance can be such a burden on one's heart.
Especially when love is everywhere inside of you
and you cannot share it with that special someone
that you long to give it to. It keeps you on edge
and constantly trying to find a way through and
around it. I do hope that you get there one day!
Thanks for sharing this here!
Jeremy0826 -
Great.
So few words, but you have portrayed this picture so well. Excellent, and I wish you well in this contest
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It's really good. I enjoyed reading it. It is written fairly well. Great job and keep writing!
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Excellent
Great write ..Written so well..I enjoyed reading it..
Betty
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