I'm sealing up. I'm closing down.
You look for me. I'm not around.
I'm going to escape. I must get out.
Someone tell me what these feelings are about.
I strum a chord. I sing a verse.
Inside I feel my heart and mind will burst.
Darkness in the room. Shadows on the wall.
Keep them out. Don't let them in.
I just can't take it all.
Paranoia in my mind. Answers to questions that I can't find.
Hiding in the corner scared. Scared of what?
There's nothing there.
I wanna scream, but I just can't do it.
Give me a substance to get me through it.
Out of place. Out of time.
The consequence doesn't match the crime.
Shield the light. Hide the dark.
Nothing left, not even a spark.
A contest entry
- Do you deserve this? by Never Fall in Love.
850 points, ended August 14, 2007, 60 entries
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just came back to read this. still love it. it's bookmarked and one of my favourites!
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Favorite.
You know this wouldn't be a true Norah comment, if I didn't tell you to fix something, so we'll just get that out of the way first. As usual, feel free to completely ignore it and reply with a simple "Fuck off. This my shit, not your's." haha.
This line, "Questions w/o answers that I can find," just isn't happening for me. It's weird. In Norah's mind, it should read differently. Maybe likeeeee... "Questions with answers I can not find."
But that's just Norah's mind, not Bennie's.
This is probably my favorite that I have read from you. It has that angry, "fuck-you-I-wanna-live-in-solitude" kinda vibe to it, which is pretty much all I've been able to spit out lately as well.
Good job.
=]
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I really like how you combined the title with the very end of your poem.
This piece was to me very much like a very confusing nightmare. All kinds of different things seem to be happening, and your words really paint all these amazing pictures. I cannot tell you how much I love this. It's just amazing!
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Thank you for your comment. You really got the fact it was like a dream. If I put myself inside a paranoid person's mind all I get is confusion. I was simply trying to translate the feelings.
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