Lilac has come out
against the violent reds
of showy hibiscus
Sunshine stamened,
creating tricks of the eye
before the city brick
Porous, dry baked,
arranged with blinding precision,
earth rises high as a back-drop
To a fusion of blurry softness,
teasing down the blue sky
while the junction vibrates
futuristic sentinels,
staring straight ahead
like arrows trained.
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A Dialogue With Nature
Please tell me what you think
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the first stanza grabbed me- the violent reds. i love the word stamened. right now i'm listening to the band 'the postal service' and the tone of this poem really matches the song, haha. my favorite line of this is "earth rises high as a back-drop"
it has a dream-like quality about it.
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thanks! 'The Postal Service'...what a great name for a band
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I loved this poem. It is so deep and meaningful. The word "stamened" is new to me but I shall certainly used it at the very first opportunity, as it is great. Great write!
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'deep and meaningful'? you're having a laugh mate.
You're right about the word 'stamened' though. thanks, and happy using!
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Cool - and I think that is all I can give you, just cool, not much body, well there is to you, liked it though, stylish, great turn of phrase and words.
Loved the final verse, I really liked this.
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Porous, dry baked,arranged with blinding precision,earth rises high as a back-drop
I saw two chimneys 20' tall
built by bricks of different colors
constructing a blotted pattern like algae on a cliff face
but cut and ordered
to I first mistook the chimneys to be made of glass
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