&&baby our drama beats all.
[intoxicate] -me- with your lies.
&&kill me>> {{with}} every w_o_r_d,
then go find [[her]] so we can fight in the morning.
__cover__ my scars with g l a m o r o u s attire,
&&strangle me with glitter |candy| n~e~c~k~l~a~c~e~s.
I'm expecting it baby,
so dont {[sugarcoat]} it.
haunt me with your heroin coated kiss.
your all over my dreams.
{{lets}}____>> get tragic,
or should i say d_i_r_t_y.
&&baby our drama beats all.
ask anyone.
your my [secret] !tragic! ♥lover♥
oops___>> the secrets out.
we're america's tragedy,
&&baby i love your {{two-timing}} ways.
she's so fake,
but you < > her plastic heart.
so bring_on_the ambulance,
becuase im the e_mergency this time.
&&baby our drama beats all.
feel compelled to lie to me
this is hollywood, baby
but soon all your foul words will be gone
and so will i.
Author notes
this poem is based on the song "in my bed" by dru hill. its about a mad whos girlfriend is cheating on him. i just turned it around so it was a guy cheating on his girl. its a little dramatic but thats how i like things. =] hope you lovee it.
A contest entry
- ღ5 fun options by Erinღ by erininthesky.
430 points, ended June 20, 2007, 7 entries
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I loved the raw emotions. I know what it can be a bit like though, the persons an addiction almost and the special treatment afterwards almost seems worth it (in a twisted sort of way). Oh to be young and naive (I was once too, still can be sometimes). I loved the choice of words too, just the way it all flowed together. It was emotive. It was harsh.
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This is nicely done, I must say. a lot of this style is usually rubbish but your writing is really good. You have an interesting style and it's too bad you mask it with strange signs and punctuation. Your words are beautiful as they are, there is no need to cover them up. You have nice rhythm and some cool imagery going on so please, please, please value every word for what it is, beautiful!
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Woah dude,
holy crap this was like powerful. I read it once and was like wtf then again and it's like woahhhhh. i LOVE IT..
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i loved this, it was really great it had a ton of emotion
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Wow. What a great use of options. I really like it! Thanks so much for the entry. ♥ Erin
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kewlness
This was amazing!!! I love the scorn in this. You show the pain a hurt girlfriend in this perfectly. You had good flow to this. Great write and Great job!!!
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