Running down the street with an electronic
typewriter, doesn't make a lot of sense
Sure you can do eighty words per minute
Run the ribbon faster than a reel of thoughts,
or make the real world seem more colorful somehow
But I'm telling you,
with a machine that size under your arm,
that you couldn't afford with three paychecks
stitched tightly together,
well, you just aren't going to get that far
down the road with that kind of weight and bulk
even if you manage to get past the store's security.
Author notes
: ) Just something funny. I watch too much Adam Sandler movies. lol
A contest entry
- Repel - Experimental Poetry by cvillelisa.
450 points, ended June 24, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Ultimate Goal by N e a r.
20000 points, ended June 2, 2008, 946 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was a soul healing write! I have read so many pieces of expressions and have noticed that so many are of heart break and loss. It is truly refreshing to come across healiong poetry.. after all,, laughter is medicine for the soul. Hmmm.. should I call you ... Dr.?
Either case, we often take on loads that we feel are beneficial,, but later after attempting to carry that load, we discover that our hands are full and the unexpected loads of life become the needle that breaks the camels back. In our hopes and dreams, we must remain realistic about our exection of reaching them. So many of lifes tribulations must be taken into account. I certainly hope that you are not carrying more of a burden than need be.
This was a much welcomed write and I thank you for sharing the healing.
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VERY, VERY Creative title drew me in.You sure can't disagree with the title. The poem was light and a joy to read. I even called some one else in the room to read it.
I just love the subject of the write, its so quirky and imaginative. Great job.
HAPPINESS ALWAYS,
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What a great comment! Thanks!
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I like how the paychecks were "stitched" together.
I'm not much for humor poetry, but I think if I was, I'd like this. -
LoL. thats pretty funny. lol. im here giggling to myselgf. i decided to check if u had written anything, as to my delightful surprise, you have! lol
i'll have to catch up on the other one later. now im really off to work.
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Do they still make those things?
If so, one would think they'd have to "give" them away. hehehe!
This is a very witty and fun piece. I like your use of reel and real.
Cris
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I'm smiling. I like this. The first three lines have a great delivery --
Thank you for entering my experimental poem contest. This one of those that appears light but also has words behind the words.
I likes.
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lol, you're right ( write? ) you aren't going to get far with one ...
It's interesting.. almost makes me think of how one can't get far with their words when they fire them off in a hurry.. or ...maybe a portable guarantee one will always have one? ... lol
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lol, that was very cute and worth reading. thanks for sharing and thanks for the laugh. Good luck in the contest
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hehe. cute and clever. I like the use of "reel/real" also, the imagery of the paycheck stitched together was very vivid. nice job!
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interestingly written. I really liked the images like 'ribbon faster than a reel', etc.
But didn't like the plot line necessarily, b/c it didn't seem that realistic. But then, I have the same problem with Adam Sandler movies :
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Well the name of the game in the contest was experimental poetry that 'repels like magnetics on the same side'. So I was going for surreal humor in an everyday type of setting like a person stealing in a store which happens all the time. I don't know if I got it quite like I was aiming for but I'm glad that it didn't seem to realistic to you or I know I would have failed for sure! lol Thanks for your thoughts though.
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