Oh dear father
they were nauseous of ferocious animals around the globe
they considered to get rid of them
while throwing them into this big ocean
but I don't understand
why they threw me in this ocean?
When I roared they remarked ,I am the ruthless wildlife
I was really jolted since
until today I was treating myself as a humane
when, and how I am transformed into a vermin
I was not astute , now
they do not find me as a stock of human beings
well you are a creator ,you created me, so
please tell them I am a human being
&*%$()#+)(*^%#@!%&(_)(*&^
$#^*)(&^%$#@)**%*)&%%$# #%*((*&^%$##@@%^&*()__++||
Okay...Okay they are right
now I started crying like an animal
well I confess for all my sins
now will you please make me your son once again
Happy Father's day
Oh dear father
A contest entry
- Abstract. Be different. by Trent plus pen.
650 points, ended July 3, 2007, 38 entries
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Very different. I like the symbols in the middle. Very abstract indeed. Nice job, and thanks for entering the contest.
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This speaks on so many levels...but the one I 'hear' loudest is the voice that asks, 'why does one society of people treat another as less than human, since we are all children of the one God?' and the last few lines asking God to make you a son again, as though only He can, it is not in your control to do so...perfect...Also, the way you have used the symbols as language makes it even clearer-this voice-to my mind, of a difference in culture or race that feels oppressed. Interesting and deep piece here. I like it very much. Peace, Rhonda
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Interesting wishing our Lord a Happy Father's Day, never thought of that one before! WEll done ~Sie
Good luck in your contest
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