My heart’s desire for true love must
regain the hope expressed in trust,
eliminating tarnished rust
from cravings of requests unjust.
When restless wind begins to gust
and stirs around the surface dust,
temptations luring us to bust,
we’ll hold our dreams as we discussed.
For once united, we’ll combust
and melt below earth’s outer crust
to join the heat of passion’s thrust,
but for true love, and not for lust.
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A fantastic piece. Amazing rhyme scheme amd I loved the language amd imagery! Really beautiful! Well done.
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thank you
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i am a pretty big fan of poems like this... when they are done right... sometimes monorhyme can just drag on and on... but if its done right it seems to get more intense and captivating as it goes... this did.. it was good...
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monorhyme is hard for me, but i am glad you liked it. thanks.
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wwwwooowwww, i'm impressed. this was fantastic. simply wonderful. i am amazed at how well it rhymed. this was awesome.....
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thanks so much.
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ya.. waiting can be depressing cant it???
the poem however... was simply wonderful! the last line was great!!!
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...that last line will make waiting worth it! thanks for your comment.
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Excellent
Monorhyme is tough to do without is sounding choppy or forced. My friend, Bravo! You have achieved success with a super subject and excellent choice of words. Whooo Hoooo I loved this. ~Pamela
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wow, great job! you did an excellent job with the rhyme, and it flows nicely too =).
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thanks... the monorhyme was difficult for me... but i'm always up for a challenge!
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Really; a beautiful write; very simple; but very beautiful. Way to excell with this.
Ryan
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well.. well... the first to comment... and leave a nice one at that!
Thanks, Ryan. I always appreciate your thoughts and opinions.
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