oh, mouse!
this way and that
the paw
Author notes
A contest entry
- The Cat Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended July 3, 2007, 40 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful. Tells volumes about the predicament in so few words.
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This indeed is a super haiku...really worthy of the gold.
Also thanks for the link you have provided for maa...gonna check it now.
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thanks bb - not so sure that the cruel aspect is 'proper' to haiku
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Congrats on the gold, Alan!
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thanks bethan-gaze
unexpected, it just so happened that the morning Jo posted this comp. the cat had delivered a mouse to the terrace
.... I just watched - maybe I should have intervened
Alan
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It's to hear the thumping of the cat's clawed paw against the floor teasing that poor mouse.
Thank you for this entry to the contest, and thank you also for the link you included in your comment below--You can be sure I'll visit the site!
Jo
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thanks Jo
That link (and the rest of the site) is probably the easiest to follow tuition of modern English haiku that I have discovered.
I know with haiku it is a little subjective and there are other opinions - I just happen to agree with the spirit of this one.
Alan
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excellent !
this reminds me of the style of haiku I have admired in jane reichhold's book about haiku, I am not sure they were from basho, but I guess they were ...
I'm still an ignorant student unable to comment properly on haiku, but am feeling that this is a haiku of greatness ...
maa
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Thank you Marion. I keep returning to an excellent resource when I stray from basics and I like simplicity in haiku
http://www.haiku.insouthsea.co.uk/teachshow_s1.htm
written by George Marsh
The section 'show don't tell' helped me immensely.
Regards
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thank you so much for sharing this ressource ...
I have bookmarked it for studying ...
I'm very good at telling instead of showing
, so this will help immensely ...
maa
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