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Twilight

AS the night drifts away-
the sun drowsily peeps out of it's endless lawn
and the stars vanish with the crack of dawn.
Purple and auzure strands appear on the sky
and the crimson ball gives out a sigh.
It yawns and sluggishly hauls over
down, the maroon and vermilion hues on the rocks hover
The pink bands dissolve in the heaven
and the cool fragrance by the breeze is driven.

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  • Kimojuno
    July 12, 2007

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    Very good, it makes me SEE the picture, I loved reading this and the imagery is amazing - great job!

    "The pink bands dissolve in the heaven
    and the cool fragrance by the breeze is driven."


  • nilav
    July 2, 2007

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    painting the heart and mind beautiful with all those colors with the crimson ball giving out a sigh is very
    interesting...


  • nichtmich silver member
    June 28, 2007

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    Wonderful

    You've picked one of my favorite subjects, the sweet simple beauty of a sunrise. The gradual dissipation of blackness gives way to light and colors. The sweet freshness of the air, and best of all, the promise of a new day. Perhaps you might want to check line #7, you have 'onthe' instead of 'on the', just a nitpicky thing, lol. Best wishes.