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Roses On a grave

As I walk silently,
With roses in my hand.
I let out a silent cry,
Why did you die.

I killed you,
It was you or me.
I won,
You lost.

Most people say that,
You deserved it.
You a murder,
You were my friend.

I didn't believe it,
When you held a gun,
To my head.

If the police,
Didn't arrive.
People think,
I would have died.

But I don't,
You wouldn't,
Would you?

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Nyalk512

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  • My Darkness
    June 22, 2007

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    this was a bit choppy, and some of the words didn't fit well together with the others, making the sentences a bit off.. i see the sadness in this, and the darkness, you have definately told a story.. thanks for entering and good luck


  • AshesFromFire
    June 22, 2007
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    I'll leave you a comment when you put what I asked for in the authors box!


  • Misunderstood-Teen
    June 17, 2007
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    Wow i love it

    I really like your poem it's so touching.