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Broken Ballerina

Another room in another hotel
Window views, looking over the river
To the south side of town;
Just one more room……

A broken ballerina’s stage
She plays the game; dances for the money
Vulnerable and defenseless;
Just another trophy without honour…

The bed of roses covered in thorns
Euphoria lost to broken souls;
Borrowing the smile of a friend
But, it is still just another room…

Beholden to the audience;
For wanting a broken ballerina
To dwell, in an empty hearted room;
Take her bows but never turn her back…

Take this broadwife dancer
The chattel, on the pay roll;
Draw the curtain closed, the broken ballerina
Don’t want to dance in any more hotel rooms…..


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  • Avatar of Innocence
    July 6, 2008
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    Last line leaves much to be desired. Nevertheless, a good write.


  • Ember Rose
    July 3, 2007

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    Sad and lonely tale of life.

    Beutifully composed, though I had trouble with the last line in your first stanza with the word 'on'. I like how you told this tale of the broken ballerina who doesn't want to dance in any more rooms of dismal hotels selling her body to make a living. The last stanza finishes a tale that makes the heart weep for her/him...so many go that route. You could turn this into a story form and I bet it would be a winner.


  • blue20bunny
    June 29, 2007

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    DEEP VERY DEEP

    You have poured emotions all through my coffee with this one..I truely am stunned to think well, maybe I'll just say that this is great write and the words "Draw the curtain closed,the broken ballerina don't want to dance in any more hotel rooms...." Not wanting to make my other comment I'll leave you with this. I still am glad to be your friend...


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 18, 2007

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    What sadness and despair fills this write. Several of the lines I can relate to. Very deep and touching emotions you have shared with your awesome talent and brilliance.

    Jeannie


  • Quiet places
    June 18, 2007

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    Intense Write!!

    The depth of this write can be taken as intensely as the reader dares go. A profound position for the ballerina to find herself in and wanting out of. The conflicts of the age of destitution and constitution!!Can she make it and keep her senses or sanity? She is willing to overcome it and move on with determination and backbreaking effort. Fantastic!! I love this one too, Don


  • robert bolin
    June 17, 2007

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    You have touched a very raw and very deep nerve on here tonight with this write mook, Leaving the neighbors gasping for air and the right to breathe again, Never have I felt so much emotion in one write
    Keep that pen pointed at the heart and the tears of your readers flowing so that the pac can find their meal easier,


  • Ravenblood
    June 17, 2007

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    Wow, this is a fantastic poem. i love the beds of roses covered in thorns, very well done.
    a wonderful write

    "Another room in another hotel
    Window views, looking over the river
    To the south side of town;
    Just on more room……"

    Claire-Anne


  • Mr Majenta gold member
    June 16, 2007

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    i haven't even read it yet, i just wanna say the title, ooh, so many ways it can go. let's see.
    beautifully done. i really loved the bed of roses and thorns, it's a great image.
    the images, oh the images. well penned.

  • Brown Eyed Boy
    June 16, 2007

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    If this is what I think it appears to be then girl, you deserve so much better than that! You need to know you are much more important to people that love you to be treated this way. No ballerinas should ever have to dance in hotel rooms or any other place for that matter.

    Jim

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    June 16, 2007

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    This write holds such sadness within it, I wish things weren't as they are... that ballerinas never had to dance.... sigh there is so much more i would like to say on this one, but I won't leave it all filling up your page, but I think you know a lot of it already

    Karen

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