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Sunset Zen (re-post)

Missing image

i.

 

Hastily following the winding highway
leading out of the city,
I resolve that I’ve had enough

and briefly forsake it
like an angry jilted lover.

 

ii.


As I caress the steering wheel

and stretch my neck,

a mantra runs through my mind,

I know it’s time

to run away.

 

iii.


The evening tide, gently rolling

along the inlet, brings with it

moist cool air that intoxicates

as I hastily retreat from

the impersonal cut and paste

urban arena.

 

iv.


It’s nearly sunset and

the seagulls

have muffled their cries
out of respect

for what is seemingly
considered sacred

as young lovers

perched on a large rock

embracing, wait for a

fresh breeze and

the setting sun.

 

 

 

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My option: Sunset

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  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwww
    such beauty is posed within this poem, so befitting of a sunset, great description. loved reading=)
    stephanie

  • ashjoe76
    January 12, 2008

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    simply amazing. Love expressions like "the impersonal cut and paste

    urban arena"

    You have the power to persuade a reader to the specific mood and feeling you experience. Congrats!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    January 12, 2008

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    Very vivid and relevant to life and soul's retreat.
    I love the messages in "cut and paste urban arena"
    and "what is seemingly considered sacred".
    It feels like you have taken some time with this one.
    It conveys an importance the writer has placed upon
    these moments. Thanks for sharing, Blue


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    January 11, 2008

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    you paint such clear picture with your words...

    fascinating.
    I love the pic, did you take it?

    I followed you to a place
    at the end of the earth
    and watched the sun set
    over your shoulders,
    you turned to me with misty eyes
    and said "peace is hard to come by,
    I've searched the whole world over"
    I understood...


  • Tarja
    January 11, 2008

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    First, congrats on the bronze and honorable mention trophies, this was very beautiful... very deep and the picture really set the reader up for something wonderful. Thank you for this lovely entry. Good luck.


  • Wild Mustang
    January 10, 2008

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    This piece is touching . Gorgeous depiction! It's wonderful. Great job, Michael!


  • Amera gold member
    January 9, 2008

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    This is beautiful! The image tells the story and creates the emotion. The read is smooth and flows as tranquil as the setting you composed.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • tara wilson gold member
    January 9, 2008

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    I love the title..there is something so zen about a sunset..this has beautiful imagery, mood, and tone to the piece...


  • Taxing Minds
    July 27, 2007
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    Great imagery and a good write


  • Mac McGovern gold member
    July 25, 2007

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    Superb. The more I read the more I liked. The presentation is to die for!! Your ability to bring the reader into your world and leave wanting more is the talent you possess. Well done indeed. Keep writing, I will keep reading.

  • Pietro456
    July 25, 2007
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    Wow a really good Poem Here !```

    I really liked this one !


  • Sandal
    July 25, 2007

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    lovely

    This is what poetry is about, for me, to reconnect the details with the big picture, and find beauty in it all. Calming emotion, lots of imagery, I enjoyed it.


  • joyya
    July 25, 2007

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    My sister and I are talking about getting a small farm. I am sooo tired of the hustle and bustle of city life. I want a garden, a cow and some chickens. LOL, I enjoyed this very much.


  • DawnBaby
    July 24, 2007
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    Hello

    Could I have your votes for this contest please I would like you to pick Gold, Silver, Bronze and 3 HM's. Tomorrow is the deadline. Hope you have been reading big guy.


  • meanderingbear
    July 23, 2007
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    Oh the beautiful picture you paint with your poetry! I don't know this place but I have been to Alaska and have seen the most gorgeous sunsets there so I can easily relate to your poem. Oh my, I am homesick for a western sunset!!!

    Carolyn


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    July 22, 2007

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    Sublime imagery and metaphor. You paint a picture of that drive and your thoughts, the inlet, the sacredness of the sunset you experience. Great piece!


  • Sonja
    July 22, 2007

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    Amazing poem, it was easy to relate with it. The right place and the right sight could wipe in a few minutes everything gray and dusty... It must be such a nice experience to know this place - as you said with your title Sunset Zen.
    ~Sonja~


  • Janice M Pickett
    July 20, 2007
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    A beautiful image you have created here. Excellent.


  • tawk gold member
    July 20, 2007

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    What a vivid picture you have painted for all to see Excellent imagery, I felt like I was there with you. Good luck in the contest


  • pen-inhand
    July 13, 2007

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    How beautiful. Your visuals take the reader on a vacation from where they are! Well done. I enjoyed this piece so very much. Kelly


  • Celticmoon
    July 12, 2007

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    To run and escape the mundane; to find a place so serene and realxing is something I believe we all search for. Some of us are lucky enough to find such a place while others seemingly spend their entire lives looking for it. Perhaps they look too hard or not hard enough, either way to know it exist is what keeps us searching. Thank you for entering and good luck!



    Blessings
    Bel

  • DawnBaby
    July 12, 2007

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    Beatiful!

    I loved the rhythm of this one, I know the feeling of leaving the city for relief. You capture the innate nature of our need for beauty and solitude. Beautifully done. The title fits this piece perfectly as well. Good luck in the contest!

  • star wars fanatic
    July 2, 2007

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    Nice piece that truly encourages taking enjoyment in the simple things of life. Good piece of work here, thanks for entering!

    *finalist*


  • freestallion
    June 28, 2007
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    I really like this vision of paradise Good luck in all your contests.


  • Kaleidoscopeyes
    June 28, 2007
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    Wow, this is truly beautiful! I love it! Good luck in the contest!


  • TwistedTatum
    June 25, 2007
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    i like the imigry the poem has, I can picture a sunset on the beach taking my breath away. Good Job


  • Sonofdead
    June 23, 2007
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    A truley beautif poem of the beauty of the sunset.

    Good luck.


  • Wonderwhenitllrain
    June 22, 2007

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    Wow, this is beautiful.
    i can just picture someone writing this while sitting under a tree...
    great imagery here.
    Awesome job and good luck in the contests!
    Amber


  • Peteskid gold member
    June 20, 2007

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    vey nice the narrative takes one to a lovely place and imagery fills in a pictire of visual elegance very nicely done...very well done...Best of luck to you in the judging...PK


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    June 16, 2007

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    Amazing

    This is an amazing piece of poetry.
    So down to earth so moving. I could just feel myself riding along the Sea shore of the Chesapeak. watching the Sea Gulls diving for food.you realy brought back some memories. (( made me homesick ))
    Somehow I feel that this is a true experience because it was so real.
    Thank you for sharing this. Will read some more of your work.
    Return the favor appreciated.








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