death falls atop my heart
as you slowly walk away
.
.
fading into your shadows
that you leave behind
.
.
remembering the tender
kisses
that we shared
.
.
you left a scar on my
heart
.
.
a stain in my soul
.
.
your prints remain
on me
.
.
my deserted heart
falls into the shadows
.
.
that you've left me
in
.
.
im fading from you
.
.
dying from you
.
.
from
you
.
.
A contest entry
- Deeper into the Darkness by Dark Soul Reaper.
300 points, ended June 20, 2007, 12 entries
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VERY interesting. I liked it. Especially how you divided everything up. It made it a little bit more eery that way.
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Nice. i like this alot, espicially the way you have the dots.. its a great poem and i wish you the bestest best of luck in the contest.
Claire-Anne -
good
i really like the second stanze withthe shadow and falling in it. Is the directed to someone in yourlief
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this is good i really like the fading into your shadows that you leave behind i like that is this poem directed to someone in yourlif
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good
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