The blood drips down my dager,
making sure it comes clean
for fear of someone thinking it was just used.
The faintness of your breath against my neck
makes me tremble
with pain and fear.
I want you to finish me off,
just use your sword,
and with one flick of it, you can hack off my head.
Let my heart stop beating,
like a drum,
it beats for you and your wonderful addicting rum.
You see my dear,
I've been waiting for you,
to come and haunt me- {again}
Cause you never stopped,
you've always been chasing me,
but never giving what I want.
I'm done with you,
can't you see,
this dagger has taken all of me.
The last bit of blood finally easing its way out
of my lifeless body.
I am dead.
Author notes
Hope you like it. I submitted it into a class for dark poetry, hopefully I'll get a good grade. Was it good?
A contest entry
- Give me some weird poems! by TwiztidMaggot.
345 points, ended June 25, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is really good! I realy like it! good job... I love the imagery..... you did good doing this! keep it up!
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wow!!this is a real dark piece.very intense
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I especially like the end. Good word choice.
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Thank you!
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Oh hun this is so dark! I loved every bit of it, you really caught my attention and sucked me into it. I love the metaphors, I know exactly how you feel hun.
Beautifully dark piece, good luck in the class hun. Love ya!
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Thanks! I got a 9/10! woohoo! How are you tonight/today? lol.
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