I am calm under my lover’s shade
As does an earring sways under a women’s ear
He caresses me always with love and kiss
His calm breathe could cool the winter
And bring more warmth to the summer
Painting my emotions every sunrise
I watch as he dips the brush in his love
Then spreads it upon my soul
Giving soft colors of peace and love
And when he kisses he drains out all the rain
So it can fall deeply within my veins
So I can feel of something superb
That whispers like nightlight in its sodden drips
A cup held of my luscious thirst, his heart
He leaves it like glass when I’m with him
So I can find it and take part
The love within contines to paint of him
In every curve, symmetry and details
What a dismay it would if I lost memory
My painting being bought at an auction house
being cherish by the owner everyday and everynight
He no longer my painting...
He no longer mine...
Author notes
Option 1
In a list
A contest entry
- I want to hear about love!!! several options by broken.inside.xx.
525 points, ended June 21, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Remember me in my opaqueness. by whiterabbit..
525 points, ended March 29, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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thankyou so much for the entry'
whisper
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I need you to put the optiion number in your authors notes by noon tomorrow so I don't have to DQ you ok??? Thanks!
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i did. its option 1 and its in my author notes
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thanks
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I like this write... It's very expressive, and perfect for my contest. Thanks for entering, and good luck
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I thinks this is nice especially that line about dipping the paintbrush in his love and spreading it all over your soul. I loved that metaphor
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This is a very well written creation, well done! I enjoyed readimg it and found it amazing...
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This poem was full of depth, the flow was easy to get caught up in and the words told the story,
A wonderful job of expressing feelings through poetry,
Many Blessings.
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Very Good
As my love contines to paint of him
In every curve, symmetry and details
What a dismay it would be if he's not with me
Someone taking my very own painting
bought at an auction house
being cherish by it everyday and everynight
Like the thought of this writing
Very well done
Rick
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This is beautiful!!!! A truley amazing write!!!!
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This is a great poem........ A very well written one with amazing outlook........Enjoyed it.....
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Wow this is such a good poem...I really enjoy reading it...your emotions shined right through....Love, Raneika
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nicely done of agony`s beauty.
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This is beautifully written. I loved reading it and I love the comparisons to art and painting.
But you didn't put the title in the author's comment box so please do that or tell me the title.
Overall this is a great poem. Good luck in the contest.
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my lips kised
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And when he kisses he drains out all the rain
So it can fall deep within my veins
So I can feel of something so wonderful
What a kiss it has been. What can I say, this is a lovely write. One has to experience such emotional part of life to really narrow it as this. I am glad you enjoyed yourself. I wish you the best in the contest. Wish I was the kisser, but hey, life has different plan. Just kidding. Your work is spectacular, you should win. You got my vote
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