I watch darkness fall outside the window
Morning light’s so far away
I watch as the stars come out to shine
Spelling out your name
Sitting here I remember the last time
Your eyes met mine so sweetly
Oh, how much longer must I wait
Until you come home to me?
There once was a day when all was pretty
Everything felt good and right
Rarely did the clouds of bitter sorrow
Ruin the beauty of the sunrise
I long for the return of the precious times
Before all was left to fade
Love was once a majestic fairytale
Yet happily ever after never came
~*~
Author notes
I'm not sure if I like this....I wanted to write a poem about missing someone, as my boyfriend has gone away for a bit, but i didn't know where to start...you may have noticed it's an acrostic of the title...i decided to do this as i didn't know where to start my poem...however, i happen to suck at acrostics...so let me know if there's anything that should be changed to make it flow better! thanks for reading, Sam (Dreams27) xxx
Please tell me what you think
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"Rarely did the clouds of bitter sorrow
Ruin the beauty of the sunrise
I long for the return of the precious times
Before all was left to fade"
Those lines are perfect. And I didn't notice it was an acrostic because you made it flow so well.
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Again, no, your acrostic is amazing, lol. I loved this one even more than the last. In a way there are lots of ways to relate to this and it makes it so special. I know you're talking about one specific journey but there are many other paths this poem can take. You're a great writer!
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I loved the personification, metaphors and imagery. This piece was romantic and I loved it, so it doesn't matter what you think about it! LOL! I'm kidding about the last part of that sentence. I found that this was one of the best-flowing acrostics out there. Keep up the great work, dear!
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Beautiful
Awww Sweet Sam no need to bash yourself I really liked this poem andf roflmao I did not ealize what style of poem you just did. any ways this is a very well penned poem and I really love how this flowed and went. any ways this is just a very well penned poem and ahhh sorry he left ya for a while but he'll be back I mean sheesh even he isn't stupid enough ti leave behind the damsel in distress being the imfamous Beautiful Sweet Sam! anyone who leaves ya behind will be shot n killed and charged with abandoning a beautiful girl like yourself. loved the poem and keep up the good work.
Paul 
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