You are the chained black balloon
Tied to this sorrowful world
Longing to one day drift away
I see you as you are tossed by
The raging winds of harsh winter
Unable to break free from your binds
I watch as you plead with the lord
For your escape from the crowds
Which encircle to taunt you each day
You are the hovering black balloon
Hanging over this miserable world
Dreaming of the day your chord is cut
And you are let loose to glide away
Through the fields of glorious sunlight
I watch as you beg the lord to redeem you
Praying that you may soar high to the heavens
And sit upon the magnificent clouds of joy
Where angels sing the sweetest symphonies
You are the waiting black balloon
Sitting over this desolate world
Hoping for the arms of a saviour
To cut you down from this crucifix
Where you were left to fade away
I watch as you ask the lord’s forgiveness
For the sins which falsely mar your soul
Separating you from the warm embrace
Of the one who truly loved you
You are the graceful black balloon
Floating over this wretched world
Praising the lord for sending you
An angel who unlocked the chains
Of your never ending agony
I watch now as the gentle breeze
Guides you up from the depths of despair
And out into the light shining for you
The wonderful light of love
You are the beautiful black balloon
Flying free
Forever
Author notes
I'm not sure if the ending works! I really feel that it needs work, I'm just not sure (at the moment) what it's lacking! I'd appreciate any feedback you may wish to give as I'd like to improve this. thanks for reading! Take care, Sam (Dreams27) xxx
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Very Nice
I really loved this poem my lovable Sweet Sam! any ways I like the ending it has flow depth and meaning to it. any ways I just really liked how you penned this poem and the way it flows through out this poem. what I was wondering what made ya write this poem and I am slightly complexed about hat exactly the black balloon meant but any ways to me it is almost as if it is a bad experience from the past and it just lingers over you till you were finally able to let it go. either way a very well penned poem here.
Paul 
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I'm afraid I can't help you on the ending, since I think it's nice as is, but I wanted to say that this is a really good poem. I love the rephrasing of certain aspects, like "chained black balloon" and "graceful black balloon".
Wee~ ^^
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