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Slip Away

There have been many people who came and left my life
I can see their reflection in the blade of every knife
But what do I care for there are so many souls I do not know
And time itself just for me passes way too slow

Now it has happened there is a spirit that I can’t release
Every day that passes will make my need for it increase
So now it begins to leave me I feel that I may die
I just can’t let this one go no matter how hard I try

I can’t breathe this air around me now I close my eyes
And you are the one I always see there is no disguise
For this pain in my veins since you left me behind
Alone in the icy cold depth of my own mind
That I can feel is beginning to slowly decay
Since that moment that I just let you slip away

Drowning is the choice of death you have bestowed upon me
There is nothing left here for only plague is what I see
Can you decode the hidden symbols upon my face
If you can then maybe your return can for them to erase

I didn’t lie that day I whispered the words I love you
Every sound that you heard from me was true
So why do you think it is right to leave me dying
In these tears of blood that I cannot stop crying

I can’t breathe this air around me now I close my eyes
And you are the one I always see there is no disguise
For this pain in my veins since you left me behind
Alone in the icy cold depth of my own mind
That I can feel is beginning to slowly decay
Since that moment that I just let you slip away

Come back home to me in a town you can’t help but hate
Don’t let me destroy all that we did create
I can’t take this anymore my lips still hold your kiss
So save me my angel for you are all that I miss

I can’t breathe this air around me now I close my eyes
And you are the one I always see there is no disguise
For this pain in my veins since you left me behind
Alone in the icy cold depth of my own mind
That I can feel is beginning to slowly decay
Since that moment that I just let you slip away

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  • underestimated1
    July 7, 2008

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    good job. thanks for entering. this isn't quite what i was looking for but i love the emotion nontheless


  • Abby Apathy. silver member
    August 23, 2007
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    from contest holder

    hmm this has an almost spoken word quality to it. well done, good luck in my contest.

    Abby


  • Naridill gold member
    August 16, 2007
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    Emotional indeed, the rhyme threw me off but apart from that was brilliantly penned.
    Thanks for entering.
    Much luck.


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    August 14, 2007
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    This was very well written. I loved it very much. So very emotional and heart-felt.! great job good luck in my contest
    xo
    kandy


  • Dreams27
    August 7, 2007

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    a good write expressing your feelings well! It's very sad! I liked the repition of some of the lines and I liked the rhyme. it all helped to get your message accross well! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck in mine and all the others! I enjoyed reading! Take care, Sa, (Dreams27) xxx


  • Lillian Rose
    July 23, 2007
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    I liked this write, I can relate to some of it. It was a little long but it keeps you reading, not noticing how long it really is. A couple of the lines left me hooked. Thank you for entering this into my contest and best of luck to ya!

    Casey


  • My Darkness
    June 22, 2007
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    AWW i know this all too well, we can not blame others for our self inflicted pain, but we can try to... i like this, it's raw and sad.. thanks for entering and good luck


  • sweetestkiss1985
    June 20, 2007
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    This is a very good poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for entering and good luck.
    Beka


  • MoonlightBeam
    June 18, 2007
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    Very good


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    June 17, 2007
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    This was a really great write, and im glad u entered my contest =) Good luck!


  • perfect motion
    June 16, 2007
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    I love the way you convey both the sense of guilt and rejection, it's a really good entry
    x

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