Twisting, turning in my bed
Timeless thoughts run in my head
Nothing, something, in my mind
Chasing what I dare not find
Sleep, I can't. What should I do?
And so I think of calling you
Call. No don't. Don't you give in
Fight those feelings that are within
[ I . must . not . call ]
Breathing, choking, let me go
Destroy everything I know
Sleeping, waking, nothing works
Calling you, it only hurts
Focus, no. That's too much pain
I won't crush myself again
Tell him. No. I can't do this
Many feelings that I miss
[ I . must . not . call ]
Standing, falling, strength at loss
Another of my useless flaws
Forming, breaking, why just me?
My sense pleads for sanity
Go. Please don't. He does not care
Deal with your futile despair.
Show him. No. Forget it all.
Ignore all that you recall
[ I . must . not . call ]
Winning, losing, it's all wrong
Feeling numb for much too long
Living, dying, he should not know
Calling won't help to let him go
Author notes
"your sleep is my essence"
hmm ... written around midnight after not being able to sleep ...
Nick should know.
At midnight, I used to call him and talk to him just so his voice can put me to sleep.
Now, I have to wait till my eyelids can't take it anymore...
...just tell me:
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*sigh* wow, i fight myself every second of the day. wanting to text him... he is my best friend, but i can't suppress how i feel anymore. my obvious decision? turn my back. let him go. he's better off with her anyway :/
this was very well versed, especially for being written frantically at midnight with no sleep. i can feel the pain, the longing... the insanity of letting go. -
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if you say that ''he's better off with her''
does that mean he's happier with her
or that he's not happy with you?
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I wish someone called me
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so sad but stay strong....
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excellent writing here, done will a lot of skill and talent, thanks for entering and good luck!!
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I found the repetition in this to be pretty good. The rhyming was okay, as well. Didn't seem overdone, at all.
A good poem that you have written here.
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Hood-Winked!
A broken heart is so hard to mend. Changes in our daily routines are hard to get used too. I am sorry that this happened to you. Excellent write
You have just been Hood-Winked courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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this was reallyt sad and yet i could relate to it and im sure many people will be able to relate to it. i liked the thoughts and argument portrayed within the poem. it made it seem more relaitic like you are in the writers mind as they try to sleep.
this was a wonderful write well done and best of luck
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Silly me ~~~~ I forgot these !!!
Please forgive me.
Granny
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Outstanding Job
Hi Sweet Heart:
How many times have you told me what you just told yourself. The moving on part I mean.
I don't need to say those same words to you, you are way too wise for that.
I sure know how hard it is at times, but you are stronger than even you know.
And I know you hate to hear things like this, but you are doing the right thing.
You will have to email me and let me know how school went. I know you did well, you always do.
You do well in everything you touch, that's why I am so proud of you.
You may not believe this, but you honesstly do have so much talent. There is nothing you can't do.
One day when you are bored, you should just sit down and read what you write, you just may be amazed.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
I Love You
Granny
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So honest
I love this the push and pull of feelings, heart against mind. The reader is completely drawn in an feels with you, feels the battle between heart and mind. But all in the end the final relisation comes..the honest truth..
Well done you have a lot of talent!
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Wow, as always you have blown the absolute socks off me, this is exceptional! (writer's block my arse!!) I love the conversations you have with yourself, should I, shouldn't I and it all flows so well, especially with the "I must not call" breaker between the stanzas. It really is excellent, you just keep getting better and better, the last line just sums it all up so well. I can't really say much more than that can I? I love all your work keep it up sis, lots of love and hugs xxx
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lol ... I wrote this quite a long time ago, babes.
So this isn't in the time of writer's block.
I just have so many poems that have yet to be posted, that I don't know when to post them. I don't want to post them all at once, I need a little bit of time between them all. But I keep forcing out writes, so that I'm not driven to complete writer's block. -
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Aww fair enough then! I do that too when I have writer's block, just write for writings sake. I hope youre ok x take care sis x lots of love xxxxx
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It is a amazing that you can relate to people with such a great rhyme scheme, and I really really like the style that you wrote it in it unique
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Dang. I wish I didn't relate to this, but I do. The phone is so tempting and it's only by force of will that I don't pick it up and call him some days. I look for excuses, reasons why I "have to" call...but there never really are any that wouldn't sound as lame as they actually are.
I do believe this is the kind of writing you do best. The rhythm and flow, rhyming, and subject matter...all trademark of your best writing and my personal favorites by you. Yet you've added the [ I . must . not . call ] lines that bring just enough uniqeness to not make it seem like anything else you've written.
Moving on is so much easier to say than do...but I try to look at it as not leaving something behind so much as getting closer to better things to come. Good luck in the contest, I think this is a winner with or without a trophy!
Much love,
~J.
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its a great poem and i can really relate to it.. i love the way u made it flow out into words because i know i have trouble gettin my thoughts straight to even get started writin sooo GREAT JOB!
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Thank you
I'm having that trouble at the moment .. writer's block sucks
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awwww that is a very sweet poem in a way
it flows really good too
and it is really hard to get over somebody
i can relate to this poem
i use to talk to my well ex now for like hours and hours and his voice just made me feel like i was safe
and then he broke up with me and i was so scared to call i wanted to so bad, he had his own band but that all fell apart but he had some songs on myspace, and i just had to hear his voice so i listened to his songs
but now i have gotten over him it took a long time
but late you will find that maybe all the time thinking about him and crying and hurting yourself was not worth the time or pain for him.
oh god wow i wrote to much
so im gonna stop
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lol, writing that much is not a problem
I hope one day I'll be able to get over him
I can't imagine what would happen to me if I don't.
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Very very good write. So honest and easy to relate to! Wish I could say more because it really is awesome, but words escape me at the moment. I also really like the form and style. Great job, dear. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Take care.
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Thank you so much
I always have your support on my poems
Thank you
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Wow. This is a great piece. I like the beat to it. I also like how it's like there were two of you and one side wanted to call and the other didn't. An in the poem it went back and forth like that. Great job! I wish you luck though. I well had similar problems at night maybe you should read while laying down or just keep writing if that helps, channel your feeling into poems like you did with this that's when I write the best.
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Thanx .. I got a new reading book to help me take my mind off some things.
I can't keep up writing ... it just feels all generic to me now ..
Thank you for your comment
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