In all the unhappiness
Joy overflows inside of me
In this deadened world
I am kicking my legs
Fighting passiveness
I could be pulled down
Pinned with nails
In bitter injustice
But I am clashing
Defeating rage and grief
I am throwing punches
Knocking fear unconcious
Peeling off these sticky lies
Swinging my blade
Conquering agony and pain
Against weighted evil
Victory is mine as
God is my undivided strength.
Author notes
It's so easy to let ourselves get dragged down by the bad things of this world. I have felt that, and seen it around me. But how much better life is when God fills us with hope and the will and desire to fight for all the good that is in this life!
A contest entry
- Positive Poems (options) by Night Valkyrie.
450 points, ended June 25, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Good Fight by second-born.
500 points, ended January 2, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 2007 - everything under 25 lines by leander.
1000 points, ended January 17, 2008, 167 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fight the good fight by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended February 6, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Broken by Samcat.
850 points, ended March 17, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lift my Spirits by aboomer.
525 points, ended May 6, 2008, 32 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Such a wonderful creation. Congratulations on your gold. -
wow - excellent wording with great depth! This is a wonderful piece. I see it's been in many contests without taking a deserved trophy, and I somehow feel you haven't entered it yet into the right contest (so don't ever give up on it!) - as this would definitely stand out. But even without a trophy, it is a trophy poem all on its own and one you can be proud of.
I can't pick a favorite line - I like them all.
thank you for this beautiful read and entry
best wishes
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9pts...
Thank you for this great contribution to The Poetic Bandits reading list
~Lilac
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This poem is in many contests. It is a positive piece on never giving up. Even when you do have God in your life, you can still get dragged down if there are too many weights on your shoulders.
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This is such a positive, uplifting poem
I really love the way you state what you feel simply and honestly beautifully done - thank you for sharing!
Keep writing
Polly
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Cannot imagine what it would be like without having faith; without that hope for the future. That's what keeps us going, knowing that there is something else...beyond all this.
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This has a lot of food for thought and certainly leaves an impact over the reader. Thanks for sharing it with us.
The Pole Star
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It's good. There isn't to much I can have to say critique wise. Nice job. It definitely makes a person think.
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You display a feeling of cluastrophobia and fighting for the next life.
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Without God and Hope where would we be? Amazing write, so full of vivid imagery. A very inspirational write. Thanks for sharing
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Wow! The line "Victory is mine" gave me all the feelings I'd love to have. This is such an encouraging poem.So glad to have come across it. Thank you for sharing~ and to have read it is my sunday blessing
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I've been struggling with some of these same thoughts lately. It's tempting to want to withdraw from everything these days. Yours is a piece that I found very encouraging. Thank you!
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Great poem. This comes at a time when I am fighting some major spiritual battles and am just realizing I must take on the warrior role. "I am throwing punches/Knocking fear unconcious" is where I need to be.
Thank you for posting this poem. Please keep me in prayer.
Love and hugs -joanne
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This is a good poem but im not sure whether it fits the description! This is really good anyway!
Good luck!
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wonderful
Very creative and well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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I'm not big on religion ...
in this kind of contest, or any other for that matter, but this seems to work fairly well the way it is.
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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This poem shows how much power one might find in their religion. I'm not a religious person myself, but I did enjoy this piece
Leander -
“God is my undivided strength….” Oh yes…if we would always rely on God, He will provide us strength more potent than the temptations around us…and I’m sure we’ll do good in our fight if we have God on our side…thank you for sharing an uplifting write…
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"Knocking fear unconscious" - I love this image. Great poem!
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Indeed, it is through and with Him that I find the strength that is needed to continue my battles in life. For without Him, I'd have been lost so long ago.
Thank you for your entry and best of luck to you.
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Beautiful
This is very beautifully written ... and with much hope and spirit ... you have really put yourself into this write ... and used such wonderful words ... if only everyone could spill the ink onto a blank page as you have done here ... it's heart filled and full of blessings ... very well done and good luck in the contest ...
Sparkeh
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