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Jack * [edited][twice]

I'm totally crushing on jack.
my head is spinning.
my stomach is fluttering.
my mind is screaming for jack.
I think i'm obsessed with jack.
  no i don't think, i know.
  my mind won't let go.
  my heart's in a knot cuz of jack.
he's hot, he's sweet, he's kind.
i really, truly wish he was mine.
he's infiltrating my mind
i'm going crazy for jack.

i want to cry,
cuz he'll never be mine.
  no, really the tears are
  welling inside.
i want this feeling to stop.
my head stop spinning like a top.
my heart listen to gravity.
come down, come down to reality.
it won't come true, not my fantasy.
but i still want to scream for JACK.
  should i tell him?
      no i shouldn't.
  would it make a difference?
      no it wouldn't.
  does he like me?
      no he couldn't.
but you don't know that for sure...

no matter what i do
  or where i go, my
  mind will never stop.
i can't cease doting on jack.

jack came to me in a dream once
i turned jack down in that dream,
cuz my hand was tied to another then,
but now i'm as free as a bird.
  i've liked him for the longest time
  i wonder if he felt the same.
but i'm starting to give up on jack.
  my mind knows it'll never happen.
but my heart won't let jack go.
  how do i know if i actually love him?
what if this feeling is only lust?
my heart or my mind.. which should i trust?
and even if he does like me,
how do i know i won't ruin it?
how can i tell?
what chances should i take?
jack is ripping my heart from my chest.
he has taken my soul from its place.

Does he notice at all
that he has hold of My all?

i can't stop thinking of
        jAcK

Author notes

i was looking through old notebooks and i stumbled across this poem.. i have tried to convey the utter frustration and stumbling of writing a poem like this by leaving out proper capitalization and any set structural things... but yeah, don't read too much into anything.
oh yeah, and * refers to the falseness of the name. like it has been changed..or made up.. if you will. lol.

okay, so everyone knows the poem started with zack* and is now changed to jack* 1) cuz my bf fed me the name and 2) cuz i like it better too...

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  • Mr Majenta gold member
    September 4, 2008
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    hooray! i win!

  • Mr Majenta gold member
    June 16, 2007

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    going emo now

    zack you son of a bitch. i'm jealous now. or maybe you just want me to change my name idk. how bout we comprimise and i go with jack... spar..ow... ug, fine, fine, we'll do it your way.


    • draagyn
      June 17, 2007
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      silly grant.. no need to go emo or change your name;D i <3 u!!


  • ShInE45DoWn
    June 16, 2007
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    *sing song voice* ZAAACKKK means GRANNNNT!!!! I get it :]

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