Bellowing constantly, all of them are ludicrous
Obnoxious thoughts, all their interest ridiculous
Yucky ways of life, discipline far and away
Superiority complex unmatchable, bad things they say
Amazing potential, yet never ever explored
Rising egoism, they need to be mentally cured
Earnest about their likings, but way frivolous attitude
Sports and action they need, won't compromise a bit
Thick-skinned they are, no matter what others admit
Uh-uh they are stupid, headcase, non-reliable freaks
Posing like a celebrity, think you're witty? you geeks...
I beg you all, please someone DO take them away
Dumbo creatures have no right to spoil girls’ day!!!
Author notes
Option #3
An Acrostic!
A contest entry
- Options (sort of about love) by Regenhart.
600 points, ended June 27, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round Four by star wars fanatic.
950 points, ended November 9, 2007, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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AMAZING!
Couldn't agree more (although i really don't know what it's like from a boys point of view) I think it is totally true and wonderful!! -
......the most disgusting thing I ever read-
But sadly I liked it
Good luck 
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so u're back on ap??
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nm Madhmita.
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This is very funny, and I mostly agree, esxcept someytimes I can't stand girls either. I know it wasn't a rule, but could you please put your author's name in your notes? Thanks for entering.
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full of witty comments and tricks = suggestion
"think you're witty? Your geeks!" -
HEY!!!! I resemble that acrostic!!! Stop it.
nicely done and congrats on the Gold...Scott
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You did awesome!
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I love your difficult-word use So you've got a winner
Congratz!!!!
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Can't see any difference in this write from if you were to have said some thing like "Kill all the jews, blacks and native americans!!"
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Like this but do think you are a tad rough on these guys, LOL Good rhythm and rhyme, except the tricks, freaks combination. Neat acrostic otherwise -
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can u suggest anything other for tricks-freaks???
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I'll be anxiously waiting for that final line to appear
thank you for entering!
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I like it so far
In your second line you've used 'obnoxious' twice. It's always a good idea to try not to repeat words like that in a poem. Maybe a word like - disagreeable. hateful, odious, repulsive, offensive?
All the best in this contest.
Gaylene
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thanks a ton Grandma...these suggestions from a wonderful writer like you helps me improve bit by bit every time...have completed my poem now!
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