walk in front of my warpath
expect to drown in a pool of you're own blood
my whole life i have taken the shit for everyone
today this shit ends
destroy what stands in you're way
and everything that does not believe in you
never trust anyone
never turn you're back
kill you're enemies
protect you're friends
use what you must
to reach the proper end
never give in
never give up
fight back 'till you're dieing breath
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i love it! it has a good flow and i love the topic.
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"never give in
never give up
fight back 'till you're dieing breath"
I like those lines. Sends a clear and strong message, which is what I like the most about this piece. Short and to the point. Very nice.
One error that you made twice though. In the lines:
"expect to drown in a pool of you're own blood"
and
"destroy what stands in you're way"
it should be "your" and not "you're"
Other than that, amazing write
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