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Al Pescatore

Amore made a pizza
for supper,
tonight at work,
with shrimp, greying scallops
and awkward calamari
which, I've learned,
is the fancy name for squid

Ferris wouldn't eat it:
he doesn't like

the floating things of blue sea,
but he liked the darkening espresso
I gave him, with a squall of sugar

and a thin spoon 

 

it became eleven o'clock, time
to step inside rented, insipid walls,

wash sullen dishes,
listen to Pat Metheny,
and pull the hemoglobic bottle
of gato negro cabernet-sauvignion
out of my chronic cupboard

my corkscrew is black
my lungs are

and my heart is,
but my wine is red 

and in a biblical glass,

this is all that matters tonight 

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  • Cat gold member
    June 17, 2007

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    yeah, this is the sort of poem i've been hoping for - i like a good story of the mundane... i like to see someone turn their bits of reality into poetry- perhaps i am a voyeur too.. but this is good and i am delighted you entered the contest

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    • rannilt
      June 17, 2007
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      Thank you, for comment and contest. I wouldn't necessarily have written this without the contest, and thus have missed important perspective on my mundane. It's a good lesson to look at the little things. I'll have to do that more often

      • Cat gold member
        June 17, 2007
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        i really enjoyed this piece and will look forward to more of the mundane in upcoming contests.. mundane makes for good poetry...


  • Gone Feral
    June 16, 2007

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    I feel a bit like a voyeur reading the poems in his contest and getting glimpses of people's lives . It is terrific really, all those little details. All that pure human-ness laid out quivering.
    I liked the thin spoon. For some reason it seemed to summarise, give the poem its essence and tone for me.

    • rannilt
      June 16, 2007
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      Thank you for noticing the thin spoon. I have been interested in the poems of this contest also: there is something in a human that cares obsessively what other humans do and say and think. This is part of life, I'm thinking.

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