The streets are completely bare;
I walk down them in silence,
Blending in with what I hear.
Not a soul passes by me,
Not a dash of wind cools me.
The streets are dead,
It's been a long time.
The reasons are familiar;
The smell of burnt wood
Tells the story better than I.
World War III it was,
Right here on these active streets.
The streets are dead now,
And so are the people.
Voices once rang out here;
Whether they were laughing
Or they were yelling,
They were here once.
But the streets are dead,
And those voices are silent.
These people were never heard;
'We the people' had no say.
We wanted to do something,
But no one saw the signs,
And took it too far.
And the streets are dead,
From the battle of the bombs.
Everyone wanted revenge;
That was not a secret.
Many different ideas for it,
The best shooshed away.
No one stands by and takes it.
The streets are dead,
But you shouldn't take it.
The president won't listen;
The people mean nothing.
They all saw it coming,
He did, too, but didn't care.
He did it how he wanted
Instead of doing it right.
And now our streets are dead.
Author notes
This poem has won a gold! Thank you!
Written August 10th, 2003
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I absolutely agree, that moron has launched us into a war for his benifit and he not listened to any views except those that support him.
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This poem is very nerve stirring ..the repetition sound like a march call of long dead soldiers..WE are all asking knowing the consequences of war why do we repeat over and over again the SAME mistakes..because it is Lunatics that start and rule the countries involved and they are oblivious of the consequences, especially when they cowardly dont directly involve themselves or their children in the conflict..Sadly we the people on the street are the fodder for their insane power games...Great write -
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wow very good piece here. of course I really liked it but I can't make any promises because it is still early in the contest. good luck -
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I find this REALLY powerful. It's really well-structured, and the repetition of "the streets are dead," works well to add extra impact. Not that there isn't enough impact in your words! I love the way you've written it, and I love the message behind it. Well, I don't love the truth BEHIND that message - but, because of that truth, it really strikes a chord. If that makes any sense. Anyway, the point is that I love the poem - and that's all that needs saying about it for now. Thanks for entering, and thank you even more for being so patient! I'm sorry about the ridiculous amount of time it's taken me to reach a decision. It's due to sheer weight of numbers, mainly. And a few personal problems... but I won't go into that. And maybe it's been just slightly due to my laziness... but I HAVE had sooooo many fantastic entries to this contest - and it's made judging sooooo difficult. And I wanna get it right. But, enough excuses - I HAVE, at long last, reached a decision. About my final 35, anyway. It WAS going to be my final 10, but 10 became 15, and 15 became 20... and, before I knew it, I had 35. But congratulations, because you're in it. My winners will be announced shortly (later tonight - and I mean that)... and... it could be YOU! (Couldn't resist that). Good luck!
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lovehateand tears, Your message,-hand in hand with the poem that inspired it, make a very strong statement. Well done!!
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This is a great peom. You just explained how I feel. how the preisdent is leading the country in the wrong derection and stuff like that good job. -
Very poignant comparison of dead streets with people that once walked on them , in sadness or laughter , or simply because that is where they chose to be. This rang of so much truth and your anti war conviction came through ....it is a very sad state of world affairs we find ourselves in right now
Best of luck in the contest
Reenie
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My uncle is in his 5th year as a US Marine and I really wish that I could send this poem to him. To me, the military has brain washed him. He went on about saying that "He would kill any towl head if it meant cheaper gas". To me, that is one of the rudest things I have ever heard. When 911 first happened my auntie and I would say hi to every middle east decendant because we wanted to show them that our family doesnt think that one race should be blamed because a few of their people screwed up. My uncle also told me that he blieves no woman should be allowed to vote unless she signed up just incase there was a draft. Hello! Not all of us are military type and not all of us agree with what is going on. I will be the first to say I want to beat the crap out of Bush cause I think that he is soooooooo stupid! He talks like he is in preschool.
Well, I wanted to say something about WW3.
Here in america, people think that abortion is bad because it is killing of the unborn. But what does it mean when a fleet of US soliders bomb a housing area and there is a woman that is 8 months pregnant. Is she really a threat? Specially if she is just sitting down because her feet hurt or if she is cooking dinner for her other children?? It just doesnt make sence to me.
I agree, Bush doesnt listen. And he started bombing again like the day right after he was elected. Can we say "Enough is Enough?"
HAHA, bla bla, I like this write, and obviously it touched me, and made me think. I am a liberal, and athiest, but I do have morals ya know? Not all of us want a WW3.
I hope you can put this in the featured box. I think you would get some really good comments. Thanks for sharing.
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Wow I loved it I love how you started it off "the streets are completly bare" that cought my attention and kept it throught the whole thing... Although part of you is right when you say the president wont listen but part of it is wrong but I really enjoyed reading it
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