Who am I to be this way,
So in love with you.
My unhidden desires to race my hand down your body,
for my love to move within you.
For your kiss, your body wrapped around me, twisting.
To hear your screams of passion,
to speak of my love softly in your ear.
I want you to bite me, to make my blood flow,
for you nails to dig deep into my back as I race within you.
For this passion to surround me forever.
All this the wants of the lost.
You left me shattered,
crying,
screaming your name into the winds.
My life a thunderstorm,
lost,
worthless without you.
The rain my tears.
The thunder the pounding of my broken heart.
Let me die.
Author notes
Something written for a contest. This one was somewhat hard to get right, to switch the flow right in the middle. Hope you like it.
A contest entry
- Make Me Feel... by KittieLyyn.
360 points, ended June 24, 2007, 39 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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That was something different and unexpected funny how I know exactly what you're talking about I'm young so good luck in the contest and have fun -
Very intense I think, it really grabbed my attention and held it. It was very interesting how it switched in the middle. Almost like raising you up so far and then falling. Like a rollercoaster or some crazy ride. Great job.
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Deeply emotional write! Written very well...loved the flow and meaning!
Peace,
Azlyn
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very good write. something different.
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i loved it.
great and beautiful, and then you pick up that really sad flow. loved and then lost. ive been there, i think you knew that, and it hurts. i hope you never find that pain.
with love
♥
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very cool. great job. good luck.
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Well penned here
Written very well and with the lust of ones heart left weaping for more . The heart in such pain the body feels lost and finds no hope without her
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