these nail bitten to the
quick, fingers
tip.tap
Ever so gently
over your 5 o'clock
shadow
your mouth
slightly parted with
breathing sounds
slumber makes you look
so a n g e l i c
sometimes
i wish you could
sleep forever.
Author notes
6/10/07
boys=bad
A contest entry
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Comments
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And you're drooling over my poems?
My god - this is bloody brilliant - especially those last lines! Boys are bad indeed - but make them sleep forever and we wont have anything to write about or curse = fact of life
Never ♥
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"sometimes
i wish you could
sleep forever."
Aww!
I know that feeling so well.
Great job baby<3
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" sometimes
i wish you could
sleep forever."
in a way, it's like that's all they do-- like when it counts.
but not the peaceful angelic sleep...rather the not-listening unaware sleep. -
The ending really struck a chord with me. When they sleep, it's easy to talk to them as well. Also, when they sleep, they don't answer back. The words seem to flow together really well ... it's actually quite amazing how stop on the flow is in this. You're always good with formatting too.
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just brilliant.
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why thank you sugarcake;;
♥
-alexsis
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