Exquisite Love (Hybrid - Nonet-Rictameter-Reverse Nonet)
Mesmerized by your every soft touch,
bringing forth exquisite feelings.
Each moment of bliss lingers,
enjoying your caress.
Warmth of our bodies
is so Divine,
heavenly,
we now
kiss.
Our love,
heated passion
escaping all of time.
We are lost within each other,
together bonded in our long embrace.
Have eyes only for each other.
Our minds communicate
without any words
Our Love
Love
has bound
us now and
eternally
together as one.
We are two souls now one.
We know of no beginning
and we cannot see any end.
This love, a gift from heaven above.
Steven Beesley (c)
Date Written : 2006-02-06
Author notes
Nonet-Rictameter-Reverse Nonet:
Part 1 of poem - Nonet:
Consisting of 9 lines, 1st line has 9 syllables with subsequent line descending by 1 syllable.
Part 2 of poem - Rictameter:
Consisting of 9 lines, with the following syllable count 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2. The first line and last line of the Rictameter are the same.
Part 3 of poem: Reverse Nonet. Same as regular Nonet, but sequence of syllables is reversed.
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wow.
It sounds so...pretty. It looks pretty too. The flow was a little...wobbly But other than that, awsome. reminds me of my first boyfriend, so intent on just being in love. -
I think the poem gets across what you want it to, but the restrictions make the flow really awkward. I would consider relooking at "Have eyes only for each other." (line 16, second stanza) It just seems very disjointed and out of place.
However, overall I can really relate to this poem. My love and I tend to just lay around in bed being in love -
I really like this, though I've never really understood why you would want to make your poem like that. Is it just for the visual effect? Because really, I think the poem speaks for itself and doesn't need to be put up in a special way.
Love the poem, very sweet and full of love! -
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Hi, thanks for you comment, the visual was created beacuse the poem was centered and not because of the forms selected.
Thank you again for your comments.
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Cool! What a good idea for a hybrid form poem, I like it! Also, i'm not usually one for love poems but this one was great. Good job on this piece, well done!
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Thank you for visiting and your kind comments.
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BEAUTIFUL
VERY MOVING PIECE I ENJOYED READING IT THANK YOU -
I COULDNT READ IT
THE FONTS AND BACK GROUNDS ARE BOTH TOO LIGHT -
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Try Now.
Hi, Thanks for taking you time, I have just fixed the problem with the font color. Maybe you would like to try again.
Best regards,
Steve
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